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Instinctive Freedom

Do I need to break free from this nook I care? Where the care and love of my mother prevail As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear In time I shrieked into a craddle in tear The spacious world during which I care and hail Do I need to break free from this nook I care? For freedom I crawled from the craddle I care On to the wondrous world of life like a snail As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear Bounded in a homestead so great as a fair Till longing to free started pulling my tail Do I need to break free from this nook I care? Striding from my house to the world in despair In far distant lands I wandered for a trail As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear How large the boundary that we set and care Longing for the freedom will raise from your jail Do I need to break free from this nook I care? As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear. Honorable Mention in STRAND no 660,any theme,any form Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand

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Date: 1/28/2020 12:32:00 PM
Not an easy form, but; you have used it well to express the woes of leaving home, but; alas, there is no place better than home, nice write Jenish, I liked it . . .
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/28/2020 9:10:00 PM
Thank you Indiana for your time and comment..
Date: 1/23/2020 11:50:00 AM
Containment does only exist in our minds, well done Jewish...
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/24/2020 12:01:00 AM
Yes..That's the truth..Thank you Charlie..
Date: 1/22/2020 1:06:00 PM
I hear your quest... left the nook myself quite early, was very adventurous,...and now? --- There's no place like home. Everyone's perspective different,...and often changing over the years. Enjoyed reflecting on this poem, Jenish! Cheers, Gershon
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/22/2020 9:24:00 PM
Thank you Gershon for your great perception.. Whenever one became conscious about the boundary, the longing to break free is instinctive.. If you are contained now, it means you are satisfied at present with the big cubicle in which you are living.. Great day my friend..
Date: 1/22/2020 7:16:00 AM
Lovely work Jenish--you executed your poem well with good flow and tone.
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/22/2020 9:23:00 AM
Thank you Vijay..Just a try..
Date: 1/22/2020 4:11:00 AM
Great written enjoyable to be read congrats salute and thanks alkas
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/22/2020 4:44:00 AM
Thank you Alkas.. Have a great day!!
Date: 1/22/2020 4:08:00 AM
A symphony of essence and rhyme that delights the heart and mind dearest Jenish! Much enjoyed your masterful form!
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/22/2020 4:44:00 AM
Thank you Demetrios for your inspiring words..
Date: 1/22/2020 3:54:00 AM
Very nice, Jenish. Best wishes in the contest. Charlie
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Jenish Somadas
Date: 1/22/2020 4:42:00 AM
Thank you Charlie for your kind comment..

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