Jenish Somadas Poet Villanelle

Instinctive Freedom

Do I need to break free from this nook I care?
Where the care and love of my mother prevail
As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear

In time I shrieked into a craddle in tear
The spacious world during which I care and hail
Do I need to break free from this nook I care?

For freedom I crawled from the craddle I care
On to the wondrous world of life like a snail
As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear

Bounded in a homestead so great as a fair
Till longing to free started pulling my tail
Do I need to break free from this nook I care?

Striding from my house to the world in despair
In far distant lands I wandered for a trail
As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear

How large the boundary that we set and care
Longing for the freedom will raise from your jail 
Do I need to break free from this nook I care?
As fiery mind longing to break loose I swear.


Honorable Mention in STRAND no 660,any theme,any form Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand

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Indiana Shaw January 28, 2020 at 12:32 PM Not an easy form, but; you have used it well to express the woes of leaving home, but; alas, there is no place better than home, nice write Jenish, I liked it . . . Jenish Somadas January 28, 2020 at 9:10 PM Thank you Indiana for your time and comment..

Charlie Smith January 23, 2020 at 11:50 AM Containment does only exist in our minds, well done Jewish... Jenish Somadas January 24, 2020 at 12:01 AM Yes..That's the truth..Thank you Charlie..

Gershon Wolf January 22, 2020 at 1:06 PM I hear your quest... left the nook myself quite early, was very adventurous,...and now? --- There's no place like home. Everyone's perspective different,...and often changing over the years. Enjoyed reflecting on this poem, Jenish! Cheers, Gershon Jenish Somadas January 22, 2020 at 9:24 PM Thank you Gershon for your great perception.. Whenever one became conscious about the boundary, the longing to break free is instinctive.. If you are contained now, it means you are satisfied at present with the big cubicle in which you are living.. Great day my friend..

Vijay Pandit January 22, 2020 at 7:16 AM Lovely work Jenish--you executed your poem well with good flow and tone. Jenish Somadas January 22, 2020 at 9:23 AM Thank you Vijay..Just a try..

Alkas Poetry January 22, 2020 at 4:11 AM Great written enjoyable to be read congrats salute and thanks alkas Jenish Somadas January 22, 2020 at 4:44 AM Thank you Alkas.. Have a great day!!

Demetrios Trifiatis January 22, 2020 at 4:08 AM A symphony of essence and rhyme that delights the heart and mind dearest Jenish! Much enjoyed your masterful form! Jenish Somadas January 22, 2020 at 4:44 AM Thank you Demetrios for your inspiring words..

Charles Messina January 22, 2020 at 3:54 AM Very nice, Jenish. Best wishes in the contest. Charlie Jenish Somadas January 22, 2020 at 4:42 AM Thank you Charlie for your kind comment..