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Inspired Response (A Tribute To Dg)

Why am I thinking 
Of ice cream melting like snow 
On seas of our tongue

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Thvia Shetley

November 13, 2010 at 9:02 PM

Aww, I love this, I imagine it to have a wonderful romantic story behind it!

Derrick Burton

November 13, 2010 at 7:28 PM

beautiful poetry and really enjoyed it a whole lot. Have a great weekend.

David Smalling

November 13, 2010 at 6:37 PM

Catie, even in jest you are an excellent reader, for the tongue is a concrete symbol of the voice, you have found a key ... now decode ice cream, snow and seas ... but remember things only melt when there is a temperature difference (so is there fire?). This is part of my experiment in less is more, and so using symbols I can with thin ice make eternity beneath our feet. The tribute is to DG because her Haiku suggested the less is more idea. Thanks for the reading

Sara Kendrick

November 12, 2010 at 3:01 PM

Enjoyed this one..The analogy is great..I am glad that I chose this one to read this eve..I was delighted that you enjoyed reading my work about the Sparrow...Sara

Dr.Ram Mehta

November 12, 2010 at 12:21 PM

A fantastic flight of imagination with these nice images, David

Carolyn Devonshire

November 12, 2010 at 9:01 AM

Deb will really get a kick out of this, David! And when I'm ready to spend a week at sea (have the money, that is), I'll be sure to let you know. It's truly my dream to live on the ocean. Thanks for your comments. Love, Carolyn