Incubus

He viewed the room in the attic with distaste.
It had to serve; he had no money to waste.
Getting a job was difficult to find
At night he went without food, everyone was unkind.

Someone, unbidden, entered the room.
A young girl smiled at him and gone was the gloom.
She gave him a hot piping plate he knew not what,
A mixture of coconut, hazelnut and walnut.

He gulped it all, he was not prim
As she sat closely, too closely next to him.
Soon he was kissing those hot lips,
Even though this was not in his script. 

Some days passed and she was always near,
Yet somehow as time went by, he lost all cheer.
Till in the end, he could bear it no more.
She swallowed his soul; death was very sore.

All in the guest house felt he would die unwell
The young girl was never seen but the room smelt of hell.

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Date: 3/12/2023 12:39:00 PM
WOW!!! What a creative write/story/ending. Have a blessed day..............
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Date: 3/10/2023 12:52:00 PM
A fantastic story/poem about incubus and the young girl, most interesting Victor … Belle
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Date: 3/10/2023 9:36:00 AM
Love the story here, Victor. Good stuff coming out of Malta, my friend. Keep it coming.. :)
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Date: 3/10/2023 5:00:00 AM
Hello Victor. You have quite the imagination and imagery here. Always are you the skilled story teller that places us in the scene and moment. May today be a day for all that it can be. Love and Blessings now and always. (smile) PS - the ending makes us pause.
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Date: 3/9/2023 12:53:00 PM
wow, what a story, Victor. She just really got him in the end!
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Date: 3/11/2023 1:21:00 AM
I withdraw my poem. Something did not click.
Date: 3/9/2023 8:40:00 AM
Phew…a great horror write! You outdid yourself, dear poet!
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Date: 3/8/2023 8:54:00 PM
Dark and unique, Victor... Just what the title demands:)
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Date: 3/8/2023 6:37:00 PM
You're a very creative story teller/writer and poet my dear friend Victor. A great captivating story indeed. All the best always although it's already a winner for me. Thanks for sharing. Blessings always and your writings. Hugs
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Date: 3/8/2023 4:01:00 PM
Oh my.. great story with great ending.
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Date: 3/8/2023 11:31:00 AM
Victor, your story was gripping right up until the ending, an ending which did not disappoint. The chills and the startling conclusion, made fun reading. Good luck in the contest. :)
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Date: 3/8/2023 10:59:00 AM
The devil is indeed sly, often appearing as a beautiful angel. Quite a startling poem, my friend. But true. I have experienced this in real life, for nothing I write about is solely book knowledge. Blessings!
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Date: 3/8/2023 8:19:00 AM
Wow, quite the sinister write Victor. Great topic and discourse! :)
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Date: 3/8/2023 6:15:00 AM
Your story is quite fascinating, Victor. The young girl who entered his room turned out to be a mischievous incubus. The conundrum of the man is quite mystical. Good luck with the contest.
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Date: 3/8/2023 5:35:00 AM
Intriguing story, Victor. Perhaps they were ghosts. Haunting, mystery!
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Date: 3/8/2023 4:52:00 AM
Whoa~~A very moving but disturbing work you have penned in this contest entry. Way to go. Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 3/8/2023 4:07:00 AM
It sounds eerie ! The young girl who came to his room was an impish incubus ! Very sad is the plight of the man. He had been already under misfortune and what a severe blow he got ! All the Best in the contest, dear Victor !
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Date: 3/8/2023 1:59:00 AM
- Woow, Victor ... the first part reminded me of an upcoming love story ... but I was really wrong ... super ending - Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a lovely day, my friend :) - hugs
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