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Incomplete song

Remember the walk we had at a dawn? You mocked the fog and sang me a song I cursed the cascade for being so rackety You cursed the wind for being so wheezy Arms in arms, walking and dancing The sun too rose giggling We passed through a garden, some buds, and birds We passed some playing kids, nurses and mosques The steepest mountain we climbed and laughed The deepest dive we dived, and survived Whale, sea horse, and shark stood shocked As with lively skills, we had them tricked Now the sun is sitting, the moon is waning Our song is still not finished, and it has started snowing ___________-__________________-___ 30th Oct, 2020 (11:30 pm) Note: this one is about love, and our short lifespan. Offcourse, it is easy to pass through different stages of life when you have a lovely companion, but no matter how much time you get, it will never ever be enough. Death never stops chasing us, even if the companions stay loyal forever ). (I am hell sleepy right now, but wanted to write this one lol.)

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Date: 12/24/2020 8:39:00 AM
I am very happy to find yet another poetic gem that you have composed. This quite clearly expresses the wonderment of love and being in love. When one values the other over all else. A fav... a very uplifting poem! God bless...
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 1/7/2021 10:05:00 PM
I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you
Date: 12/7/2020 1:54:00 PM
A great poem, Pagunda. You're right. There never is enough time :)
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 12/23/2020 11:05:00 AM
Unfortunately
Date: 12/6/2020 9:20:00 AM
Quite lovely Paghunda, so true that life is fleeting - and, so much time is spent waiting on it. Thank you for stopping by my sight.
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 12/23/2020 11:05:00 AM
Welcome
Date: 12/4/2020 11:25:00 AM
A beautiful life song Paghunda; may you sing it forever :)
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 12/23/2020 11:04:00 AM
Amen...thanky you
Date: 12/3/2020 9:52:00 AM
Hi Pagunda, What a breathtaking poem - the love of your life will be when you lose your breath when your first meet then, when you have your first kiss, and you feel there is nothing under your feet, you are floating and when the day comes that you are close enough to make love, then you will know, when the feeling is overwhelming, and encompassing. I have made this poem a fave. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 12/3/2020 10:11:00 AM
Sounds fantastic Jennifer! Thanks a lot :)
Date: 11/22/2020 6:38:00 PM
I like how you have made this symbolic of your love and lifespan. It's very cute how you used the images of things like the sun rose giggling!!
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 12/3/2020 10:10:00 AM
I am glad you enjoyed it. Our lifespan on this earth is indeed very short. Thank you Andrea. Stay blessed
Date: 11/4/2020 3:53:00 PM
I believe you will finish your song with the right one. Great write, Paghunda
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 4/29/2021 4:36:00 PM
Thanks for the wishes
Date: 11/2/2020 10:51:00 AM
Maybe you are in a parallel universe .... Maybe my poems seem better there lol
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 2/8/2021 7:44:00 AM
Haha
Date: 11/2/2020 9:08:00 AM
I have many poems about falling in love, but you will know when you do fall...
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 11/2/2020 9:10:00 AM
Somewhere in a parallel universe, I might be reading your poems right now.... (you may not know but I am a big fan of your poems,, would read it anyway...
Date: 11/2/2020 7:54:00 AM
That must mean you have not found the right person to sing it too...
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 11/2/2020 8:01:00 AM
Well, to be honest, I do not know how people fall in love.. . Like your love for your family is another thing, and I believe in this love. As far as that romantic love is concerned. It is absolutely Greek to me... Like you can not fall in love with 'anybody', esp, when you have drawn a circle around yourself, and promised yourself not to cross that line, & never to fall in love.. Hehe May be ppl fall for each other when they want to fall, you know, well no idea.??
Date: 11/2/2020 1:33:00 AM
Is your song complete?
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 11/2/2020 3:50:00 AM
I haven't even sung it yet. Nobody has heard it yet. Haha
Date: 11/1/2020 12:26:00 PM
Creative way to go for the contest. Congrats on your winner. Sara
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 11/2/2020 3:49:00 AM
Thank you Sara
Date: 10/30/2020 11:43:00 AM
Love is a beautiful thing, but it does not always last... Sometimes it's taken from us, downtimes it leaves us.... But we always have the memories..
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 11/2/2020 3:48:00 AM
Indeed... thank you for the comment