Incomplete

As the day has grown old to its age,
The night is abloom with youth and beauty,
We came closer and entwined to one,
But then destiny came amidst,

Success invoked my man’s ego,
And glory bonded you with aspirations,
Our ways separated, dreams shattered,
No one was to be blamed, but the situation,

I ignored sagacious friends,
I was running away from salvation,
Undoing the thought of the wad which was missing,
I continued to my voyage without defining the destination,

I won the battle but then realized,
I was on my own to share that surprise,
As for which I gave my whole life,
It was actually a fool’s paradise,

It cost my life’s biggest treasure,
For it cost me her indeed,
Yes! Now I meant something to the world,
But meaning of life without her was incomplete.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 8/18/2012 11:06:00 PM
Yes, a lot of times in our ignorance, we come on too strong, and have to pay the price. Thank goodness, the greatest treasure does not stay that way when we lose it.
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Deepak Ahuja
Date: 8/21/2012 1:14:00 AM
Hey Charles. Truly said. It inspires to see the message is reaching the readers. :)
Date: 8/18/2012 8:01:00 AM
nice write.we always run behind things which cost us our whole lives.
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Deepak Ahuja
Date: 8/21/2012 1:12:00 AM
Hi Kenisha. Thanks a lot.
Date: 8/14/2012 5:20:00 AM
very beautifully woven.
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Deepak Ahuja
Date: 8/21/2012 1:12:00 AM
Thanks a ton. Glad you liked it.
Date: 8/14/2012 2:55:00 AM
Deepak a sad tale of how we lose track of those that really matter while we pursue a dream, well said...David
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Deepak Ahuja
Date: 8/21/2012 1:12:00 AM
Thanks a lot David.
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