Incandescence

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Mariana in the south by John Waterhouse

Through mirror’s bilge, Mariana on deck -
Wick’d queen, licks lips, with a delicious scheme.
In mock ascent, ego gives cheek a peck.
Suddenly daughter’s reflection - a gleam,
As snow forms queen’s exhale into a scream,
Her rubious threads covered in bright light, 
Mariana’s hair in cascading flight.
Furious dark red strands taint apple’s flesh.
Fruit’s innocent beauty beckons a fright.
Hoary-shapeshifter tempts Eve - step-hate fresh.

8/15/2020
Contest: Pick-A-Title, Vol 21 - Dizain
Chosen Title: Incandescence
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh
Dizain in 10 syllable lines
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Checked by howmanysyllables.com

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V. Deepa

Date: 8/26/2020 10:50:00 PM

Wonderful writing with beautiful imageries dear Kim mam.:-) Congratulations on your win ..Keep inspiring. Take care.Much love from Deepa:-)

John Watt

Date: 8/20/2020 3:15:00 PM

Well done, good to see a win for this lovely write, Kim!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/20/2020 3:55:00 PM

Thank you so much! <3

Edward Ibeh

Date: 8/19/2020 5:14:00 PM

Congratulations on winning my contest with this amazing poem that truly shines, Kim:-) Love it!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/19/2020 6:16:00 PM

Thank you, Edward

John Watt

Date: 8/18/2020 10:19:00 AM

Wow Kim, what a feast! I couldn't see the image here, so I googled it and it's one of my favorite Waterhouse works. Your references to both Snow White's evil queen and the temptation of Eve grounded this write in both art and literature that made your 10 lines expand in many dimensions. Brilliant writing, my friend, def a winner to me ~ John

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/18/2020 10:37:00 AM

Thank so much, John! That means a lot. Unfortunately I have a hard time finding images that are usable. I left the notation up so people could look it up or know what I used. So glad you did. Hugs...Kim

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/16/2020 11:46:00 AM

Beautiful poetry my friend--loved the details in splendid imagery, Kim.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/16/2020 1:14:00 PM

Thank you, my friend! :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/15/2020 9:51:00 PM

It's about time someone gave 'Snow White' an update. And my goodness, Kim, you pulled her right into a doozy of a moment! I feel like I've just returned from a Class-A summer horror flick! Smiles, Gershon

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/16/2020 4:50:00 AM

Thanks for the hair-raising comment :) So glad you enjoyed!