Gary Smith Poet Rhyme

In Unspeakable States

The soldier looked out
To a landscape defiled,
And wondered, was he in hell.
Around him men lay
In unspeakable states,
Ravaged by bullet and shell.

How could this be
These men so alive
Now lay there dead in the mud,
His comrades and friends
Had suffered and bled,
Amid their corpses, he stood.

He thought why not him
For he had went too
Over the top with his mates,
Into the maelstrom
They went forward as one.
Now they lay, in unspeakable states.








Entry for STANDARD CONTEST NO 75,
ANY FORM OR NONE,ANY THEME,
UP TO A MAX OF 20 LINES - Poetry Contest 
16/3/2018,   Placed 1st.

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Heidi Sands March 29, 2018 at 2:15 PM This really reaches the reader deeply! Well done Gary :) Gary Smith March 29, 2018 at 4:12 PM Thank you Heidi :)

Gregory Richard Barden March 23, 2018 at 7:49 PM Congratulations on your win, Gary - keep up the great work! :-) Gary Smith March 23, 2018 at 8:03 PM Thank you Gregory :)

Kim Rodrigues March 19, 2018 at 9:18 PM A despondency as the survivor! Congrats! Gary Smith March 20, 2018 at 4:33 AM Thank you Kim :)

Andrea Dietrich March 19, 2018 at 3:02 PM This one leaves such an impact. I love it and I see congratulations are in order!! Way to go in Brian's contest. Gary Smith March 19, 2018 at 5:49 PM Thank you Andrea :)

Line Gauthier March 19, 2018 at 10:19 AM A very emotive poem, Gary. Well done and congrats on your top win. Gary Smith March 19, 2018 at 11:04 AM Thank you Line :)

Laura Leiser March 19, 2018 at 9:50 AM Your well chosen words captured the horror of death and war so well, Gary. Very moving poem! Congrats on your win! Gary Smith March 19, 2018 at 11:04 AM Thank you Laura :)

Janice Canerdy March 19, 2018 at 8:53 AM Very moving WINNING poem, Gary! Janice Gary Smith March 19, 2018 at 9:19 AM Thank you Janice :)

Susan Ashley March 16, 2018 at 6:20 PM Powerfully expressed remorseful introspection offered by your war-ravaged soldier Gary. A heartfelt and harrowing poem. Superb poetry. ~Susan Gary Smith March 16, 2018 at 6:29 PM How kind Susan, thank you :)

CayCay Godwin March 16, 2018 at 4:05 PM I have felt this exact 'feel' during most all war movies, different wars in different centuries or decades, but the same feel. I know it has haunted many military survivors their entire lives. A poem that needed to be written you have have written as it needed to be. All the best ... CayCay Gary Smith March 16, 2018 at 4:10 PM Thank you CayCay :)