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In Thin Ice

lucy found a bottle on thin ice she picked up the bottle that was once on thin ice she thought it looked cool and took a drink on thin ice she feel ill at first but wanted another slurp on thin ice more and more swigs went down her throat on thin ice she drank and drank to nothing was left to go on thin ice lucy gets in the car and drives away far on thin ice her vison is blured her perception not clear on thin ice lucy felt a quick jolt of the car on thin ice she did not get to far until she was gone in thin ice Dedicated to Amarilla Janson

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Date: 9/24/2009 9:11:00 PM
It is sad to hear about such tragedy. I feel your loss. I think that all of us are on thin ice, and the scary part is that we don't know when the ice will break. By the way, nice form of writing. I.N.
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Date: 9/24/2009 7:21:00 AM
Great poem and a chilling impact.. well done! Hugs, Robin
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Date: 9/21/2009 4:08:00 PM
Sadness I am feeling here. I am sorry for your loss. Keep writing. Sara
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