In the Sun's Last Glow

On her terrace where she once had viewed a crimson field, she stands recalling heroes who were battling their foe. She still can feel the terror! How her poor heart reeled thinking of her lover fighting on the field below, with others on that plain bathed red as the sun dipped low. The brave men lie in caskets which now are concealed beneath a plain that ran with blood, where bright irises now grow. She thinks of her own strong brave man, draped in white and sealed forever in a casket too. He was her Romeo. The sorrow flooding her she had never thought to know. She looks down from her terrace with a heart that won’t be healed. The mighty dead now lie in grassy fields. . . and lo! Around the graves are swords, which are green blades revealed with *purple flags that softly wave as a May wind starts to blow and she is bathed in red again, there in the sun’s last glow. * Purple flags refer to the name of the purple iris that resembles a flag Submitted for Mark Toney's '2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 25' Contest
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Watt Avatar
July 17, 2022 at 3:34 PM
It's very beautiful how you wrap this up with the green blades, purple flags, and the mourner bathed in red of sunset's glow. So poignant and moving. Great work using all these rhymes without any feeling forced.
Horsman Avatar
April 17, 2020 at 12:56 AM
If ever i was there, within the poem, it is this one Andrea..again your pen driven by your mind, is golden.. Do you remember 'Mary Yaws' here on soup...??????
Robinson Jr. Avatar
October 12, 2017 at 9:18 PM
Such an emotionally moving poem, Andrea. A mighty fine example of this elegant poem form. Ty for the poetess note regarding "purple flags." It enhanced my understanding of this richly sublime poem very much. Tho' I do love cryptic mystery rune stone words and phrases in a poem. Makes me do mental exercise to ascertain the deeper meaning conveyed by a talented poet or poetess. I think I would've figured it out ... swords/green blades ... purple flags/softly wave. Beautiful poetry. Love and hugs.
Dom Avatar
July 25, 2016 at 11:41 AM
A high placing here, Andrea, the sun has not yet set on this piece.
Lamoureux Avatar
July 24, 2016 at 8:08 PM
I'm not surprised this is a winner, congrats Andrea.
Raven Avatar
July 24, 2016 at 6:53 AM
Hi Andrea, excellence flows from your pen once again. There are mixed feelings when one loses a loved one in battle. There shall always be the sorrow. The overriding emotion is always sadness. This poem is so well written. I Love the emotional content. One feels as if one is there in the scene. This is a seven Andrea. Hugs....Mike. XX
U.D Palawon  Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 11:04 PM
This is so sad...great write Andrea. Congrats on your win. Sunita :)
A  Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 11:00 PM
Andrea, nice to see you join this one. Love the imagery. SKAT
Scars Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 5:46 PM
Andrea, congrats on your placement with this awesome poem lady! :)-luloo
Konos Avatar
February 27, 2016 at 8:26 AM
Congratulations on First Place! Consider installing a larger trophy mantel remembering to shore up your support walls! CHEERS!
Kimathi Avatar
February 26, 2016 at 5:17 AM
Congrats Andrea, for your placement in the contest!! ;-)
Godwin Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 5:27 PM
I saw the blog for this creative, emotional, and winning poem. Way to go, Sweetie - such an inspired job ... CayCay
Gentry Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 12:42 PM
Excellent! Congratulations on your win!
A   Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 1:01 PM
Congratulations Andrea... LINDA
Scars Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 11:50 AM
Andrea, beautiful, congrats on your well deserved top placement! -luloo
Callus Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 9:14 AM
This is metaphorically beautiful, Andrea, and your treatment of this English Quintain makes this form look easy, which in fact it isn't. Congratulations on being placed first! // paul
Anderson Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 7:31 AM
Congrats
Selfa Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 7:16 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win! You really are deserving Andrea! :)
Smith Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 5:48 AM
Congrats on top win with this touching tribute to the fallen heroes... Love your imagination and imagery here!.. Well done dear friend.. Hugs.. Arlene
Pennell  Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 5:03 AM
andrea well done you should be published your poetry popular with everyone who reads it
Dietrich Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 3:36 PM
Thanks for your comment, Stephen. I have been published. I just grew jaded from the "poetry magazine" world not wanting to pay for poems and from getting chapbooks published but not being able to market them to the public, so only friends and relatives bought them. I just enjoy these days entering contests. But I really should look into contests that pay money. I used to do that in the old days and I was such a thrill to win money along with the certificates!!
A. Sharma Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 4:02 AM
Congrats on superb top place winning poem Andrea!!
Duncan Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 4:55 PM
love the images of your purple mountains majesties " iris " I read below you have won with it, and I see why ;} glad you liked my Starry Night kitty poem ;}, sorry I haven't posted new poems. I want to like them before I post. I know it's "crazy" ;} <3 <3 <3
Jordan Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 8:28 PM
Interesting... A balance of beauty and horror, power and sensitivity. A much deserved win. Congrats... Jack
Seal Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 7:08 PM
Back to back congratulations eh Petal, does it get any better. Great write deserved its place. Take care, Richard
Madonsela Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 2:25 AM
HI Andrea wow great poem , deserving of the placement. congrats my friend. *smiles* Ron
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