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In Red's Silent Fury

Metallic city howls like a wounded animal scraped by nocturnal vigils of grandchildren and elders emaciated like tuberculosis lungs gasping from chug-chugs of tobacco soot... and the face of a night is hammered by ripped moans like plucked strings in motel rooms; pagan women opening limbs for a meal in silent fury. This is the other side of town, so real... beggars peddling hope; factory shoulders ranting over shuffled cards and fired gin as wives’ blistered fingers clean rented pots, gibbering same monotone of hymn, “give us daily bread, daily bread”. Outside, the pier coughs off the commercial honks of weighed cargo reeked with labor’s perspiration, where pawnshops buzz with greed's snicker... the evening owl attempts winks under the grime of bloodied moon… it spits the larynx of tenants’ raged hoots wishing morsels of fresh sunset would pour some grace of life’s salve. I weep before the shrill of red sets in... again.
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Truth Contest sponsored by Anthony Slausin Re-post 5/28/2019

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 6/11/2019 8:24:00 PM
Every line is a poetic gem in this masterwork, Nette. Gripping, gritty and gorgeous in its vivid emotional imagery, this piece is deeply affecting and a fav. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/7/2019 11:07:00 PM
Wow that is a really vivid description. Well penned, nette. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 7/13/2016 12:40:00 PM
There is such a raw energy to this unusual poem, Nette !! Congratulations on your wonderful poem !
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Date: 7/13/2016 11:38:00 AM
Congrats on your win my lovely smiling friend with this beautiful poem polished with sadness. a beautiful 7 indeed. Loved always, bl
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Date: 7/13/2016 1:01:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations on your awesome win. Thank you for the support. Stop by and enjoy the sanity of my newest Blog "In Red's Silent Fury." Always & Forever WUV ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/12/2013 7:43:00 PM
Amazing, Nette! Congrats!
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Date: 12/12/2013 11:43:00 AM
Way to go with the sound of color..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 12/12/2013 5:56:00 AM
Reply to your repy to my reply to your...Oh well, you know what I mean...Soup Mail
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Date: 12/11/2013 7:10:00 PM
You just keep pumping out the masterpieces. Congrats on another Win...Roger
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Date: 12/11/2013 8:37:00 AM
nice win...luv...Linda
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Date: 12/10/2013 9:47:00 PM
Congrats on the win, nette
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Date: 12/10/2013 9:39:00 PM
Wow Nette...I LOVE to see this gritty, dark side of you! This reminds me of Subic Bay when I was stationed there but I assume it is about the ghettos of Manila or some other large city? The last line is a true stunner. 'the shrill of red'...WOW
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Date: 12/10/2013 5:42:00 PM
Nette.....CONGRATULATIONS!!!
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Date: 12/10/2013 3:54:00 PM
wow, an amazing poem< nette. BIG congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 12/10/2013 11:15:00 AM
- Congratulations on your winning poem in: "THE SOUND OF COLOR" contest: Sponsored by: Monterey Sirak - Nice to join and nice to read your poem Nette. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/10/2013 9:57:00 AM
What can I say to a masterfully creative piece like this? Your images are stunning and powerful. I could imagine the scene and hear the furious moaning, gasping, and howling. Awesome! Congrats on your win and thank you for entering.
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Date: 11/22/2013 4:40:00 PM
nette, wonderful poem.great. (: ) Jenish.
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Date: 11/19/2013 6:12:00 PM
Nette..I must echo pretty much what Richard said...and others too...I'll have to read this again....after the tears have cleared...this just came out of your soul and into words...
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Date: 11/19/2013 2:20:00 PM
a very deeply penned beautifully written piece
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Date: 11/19/2013 11:05:00 AM
OMG, harsh truths and reality we try to close our eyes from. There are slums in every part of the world and we'd rather keep mum about it. But you chose to give a brazen voice to this with blunt and evocative images. I praise you, Nette as I take deep breaths!
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Date: 11/19/2013 8:41:00 AM
This poem made me think of Drake in the imagery and metophors you used. I have to say this really impressed and moved me. I will have to read this one over and over to absorb all the imagery. Outstanding piece! A poet could write a lifetime and never write such an amazing piece. You should be very proud.777777777777777fav!
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Date: 11/19/2013 12:06:00 AM
HEART BREAKING! Your poem, with its vividly emotional content, added to making this a first class work.To feel the hunger , dire need, and agony of poverty in every man, child, woman is mind-blowing. You finally gave the less forunate a name, Nette. How brave of you.
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Date: 11/18/2013 5:15:00 PM
Yes, this poem expresses those on the other side of the tracks, the side at which I should be on but am blessed to have what I do have! This is such an emotional write my friend, filled with a flair of the poor, and them not even realizing that they are this way, it's just life to them, what they must endure to go on! A beautiful piece my friend, I really enjoyed reading this immensely glorious poem this evening, Great Work!!
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Date: 11/18/2013 1:11:00 PM
I can really feel the pain through the beggars..the wives..the labourers but mostly the pain of those who have to open limbs just to survive.Unjust is this world sweet Nettie.When i read these verses i feel ashamed of my luck and for not being there..cause these people are human like i am.A favourite and huggs..Tnks fpr stopping by.
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Date: 11/18/2013 1:08:00 PM
Oh, Man! When you hit on it, you hit it hard! This an explosive description in "the day of a life" of people from the poor side of town.Your way of creating both the physical and emotional world is so unsettling, and I love it---- the details,the mood, the despair! Only you can get away with this, Nette. Priceless poetry!
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