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Writing Challenge - U or V words - Poetry Contest, Constance La France. Date: 08/12/2023

In Pursuit of Elusive Butterflies

                   We're known to 
                Waste time coveting 
               Things we can't have.
     We mortgage our castles in the air  
            Pursue illusions, rainbows...

            That yield no pot of gold,
              As opposed to waiting 
          For these elusive butterflies 
      To organically alight on our palm.
              In our dogged pursuit,

          We recklessly trample upon 
             Our flower beds, leaving 
            Bloomed flowers in ruins.
          You let be those butterflies 
                   You can't trap... 

             Inside your clenched fist.
         Exercise patience, they'll come
             On their own time, if not,
         They're not meant to be yours.
        Instead, pause and watch them 

                Float with abandon
         Over your manicured garden.
                Visually trace them 
              From flower to flower;
               Admire their beauty...

               Until they quietly flit
                  A     w     a     y;
                  They're visitors 
                 Not meant to be 
                       Caught
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Kauffman Avatar
August 25, 2023 at 11:55 AM
Amazing perceptive write, Edward! You articulate with eloquence the metaphor of the butterflies! Congratulations on your win! I think this is one of your best. Blessings to you and your family!
Ibeh Avatar
September 2, 2023 at 11:32 AM
Thank you very much for the wonderful feedback, visit and congratulations, Sam:-)
Miller Avatar
August 18, 2023 at 2:38 AM
Great subject choice and elegantly executed; congratulations
Ibeh Avatar
August 18, 2023 at 4:19 AM
Thank you very much, Terry:-)
Andresen Avatar
August 16, 2023 at 11:03 AM
- Congratulations on your win, Edward :) -(Hope the baby is doing well :) - hugs
Ibeh Avatar
August 18, 2023 at 4:19 AM
She is, Anne-Lise:-) Thank you so much for the feedback and congratulations!
Goldsmith Avatar
August 14, 2023 at 9:21 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your write. Have a great day with your win............
Ibeh Avatar
August 17, 2023 at 3:43 PM
Thank you very much, Paula:-)
Dietrich Avatar
August 13, 2023 at 2:42 PM
oh I just love this one. you chose a great concept to work with , Edward. Congrats on the win
Sands Avatar
August 12, 2023 at 11:30 AM
Lovely poem and free the butterflies. Nice, Edward :)
Pandit Avatar
August 12, 2023 at 5:22 AM
Lovely metaphoric poem, Edward. Yes indeed--let those butterflies be! I like the message of your poem.
Ibeh Avatar
August 17, 2023 at 3:43 PM
Thank you very much, Vijay:-)
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