Jan Allison Poet tristich

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I'M Feeling Fruity

watermelon smile
hard green skin hides your beauty
i spit out the pips

12~31~16


THE TROIKA (Haiku with hooves) Contest

Three lines of galloping poetic thought
similar to the Haiku as it will maintain the 5-7-5 syllable count
different in that it no juxtaposition is needed

Sponsored by John Lawless

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Eve Roper January 24, 2017 at 9:21 PM haha ... I love watermelon :) thank you so much for my birthday wishes. Hugs sisters in birth day

Peter Dome January 8, 2017 at 10:26 AM Me too, but a tasty write. Uhhmmm. A piece of melon and I'm anybodies. Even without. Any offers. Pete.

Freddie Robinson Jr. January 3, 2017 at 3:29 PM I love the taste of this poem, Jan. So sweet. Happy New Year. Love and joy to you. Jan Allison January 7, 2017 at 7:40 PM Thanks so much Freddie Happy New year to you too:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus January 2, 2017 at 3:00 PM Unfortunately this reminds me that it's a long way to summer, Jan, but a lovely poem it is....and I usually spit out the seeds, too:) Hugs // paul Jan Allison January 2, 2017 at 3:13 PM I'm not sure if its right for the contest I may work on another if inspiration hits:-) Happy new year to you all:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel January 2, 2017 at 6:02 AM Loved this fruity troika, Jan:) Jan Allison January 2, 2017 at 3:12 PM Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich January 1, 2017 at 5:25 PM I love it, Jan. I don't know troika from Adam, but I sure love this. Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 5:30 PM troika - three line poem 5 7 5 with no juxtapostion:-) I did have a poem published last year in a three line poetry book published by Prolific press :-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish January 1, 2017 at 2:58 PM This is an enjoyable and well written haiku. But didn't you mean "pits" instead of "peps"? Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 3:03 PM I know them as pips or seeds Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen January 1, 2017 at 2:30 PM - A juicy Haiku, Jan :) - Good luck in the contest - Happy New Year :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 2:38 PM Thanks Anne Lise I may write another poem I don't think its good enough for the contest:-) happy new year:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith January 1, 2017 at 9:47 AM Haha...Just don't spit them at hubby...Have a happy new year Jan Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 2:18 PM ha ha ha I only ever have them on a buffet at a hotel - we would never get through a whole one on our own:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White January 1, 2017 at 9:00 AM I'm so happy you feel peachy today. Glad the holidays didn't make you bananas. I hope John won't be cherry-picking and you stand a good chance ;) Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 2:20 PM I think I'll have to come up with another poem Darren am not happy with this one for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe January 1, 2017 at 8:40 AM As so often, your poem made me smile - thanks for that. Happy new year to you, dear Jan! Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 2:23 PM Thanks Agnes - watermelon does look like a smiley face when its sliced :-) hugs jan xx

Lim'Rik Flats January 1, 2017 at 8:19 AM Hoppy New Year fruity patootie! huggerboodles ~ john Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 8:21 AM Thanks John Happy New Year to you too:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong December 31, 2016 at 7:33 PM This made me smile Jan! Have a blessed new year my friend! : ) 7 Jan Allison January 1, 2017 at 3:40 AM Thanks Connie:-) I think this is too simple for John's contest so I'll probably withdraw it and try and come up with something else:-) hugs Jan xx