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watermelon smile hard green skin hides your beauty i spit out the pips 12~31~16 THE TROIKA (Haiku with hooves) Contest Three lines of galloping poetic thought similar to the Haiku as it will maintain the 5-7-5 syllable count different in that it no juxtaposition is needed Sponsored by John Lawless

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Eve Roper

Date: 1/24/2017 9:21:00 PM

haha ... I love watermelon :) thank you so much for my birthday wishes. Hugs sisters in birth day

Peter Dome

Date: 1/8/2017 10:26:00 AM

Me too, but a tasty write. Uhhmmm. A piece of melon and I'm anybodies. Even without. Any offers. Pete.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 1/3/2017 3:29:00 PM

I love the taste of this poem, Jan. So sweet. Happy New Year. Love and joy to you.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 7:40:00 PM

Thanks so much Freddie Happy New year to you too:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/2/2017 3:00:00 PM

Unfortunately this reminds me that it's a long way to summer, Jan, but a lovely poem it is....and I usually spit out the seeds, too:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2017 3:13:00 PM

I'm not sure if its right for the contest I may work on another if inspiration hits:-) Happy new year to you all:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/2/2017 6:02:00 AM

Loved this fruity troika, Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2017 3:12:00 PM

Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/1/2017 5:25:00 PM

I love it, Jan. I don't know troika from Adam, but I sure love this.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 5:30:00 PM

troika - three line poem 5 7 5 with no juxtapostion:-) I did have a poem published last year in a three line poetry book published by Prolific press :-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 1/1/2017 2:58:00 PM

This is an enjoyable and well written haiku. But didn't you mean "pits" instead of "peps"? Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 3:03:00 PM

I know them as pips or seeds Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/1/2017 2:30:00 PM

- A juicy Haiku, Jan :) - Good luck in the contest - Happy New Year :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 2:38:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise I may write another poem I don't think its good enough for the contest:-) happy new year:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 1/1/2017 9:47:00 AM

Haha...Just don't spit them at hubby...Have a happy new year Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 2:18:00 PM

ha ha ha I only ever have them on a buffet at a hotel - we would never get through a whole one on our own:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 1/1/2017 9:00:00 AM

I'm so happy you feel peachy today. Glad the holidays didn't make you bananas. I hope John won't be cherry-picking and you stand a good chance ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 2:20:00 PM

I think I'll have to come up with another poem Darren am not happy with this one for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 1/1/2017 8:40:00 AM

As so often, your poem made me smile - thanks for that. Happy new year to you, dear Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 2:23:00 PM

Thanks Agnes - watermelon does look like a smiley face when its sliced :-) hugs jan xx

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 1/1/2017 8:19:00 AM

Hoppy New Year fruity patootie! huggerboodles ~ john

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 8:21:00 AM

Thanks John Happy New Year to you too:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/31/2016 7:33:00 PM

This made me smile Jan! Have a blessed new year my friend! : ) 7

Jan Allison
Date: 1/1/2017 3:40:00 AM

Thanks Connie:-) I think this is too simple for John's contest so I'll probably withdraw it and try and come up with something else:-) hugs Jan xx