If I Wake Up

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On my way to visit my siblings in Georgia and Florida. I haven't seen some of them in years. But, I am very nervous... I hate flying (lol)

If I wake up... eating peaches And I'm still walking... in my brown shoes Then I'll be visiting my sister... in Atlanta And I'll be singing... some Georgia blues If I wake up... eating avocado And pass an orange orchard... along the way Then I'll be visiting... my other siblings About an hour... from Tampa bay But if my eyes... don't see no sunrise And my soul... is flying high Then I'll wake up... eating angel cake And see the sunset... when I die So So I made it... to Atlanta Visited a town... known as Helen And I woke up... eating peach cobbler With a side... of watermelon Then I made it... to hot weather Visited a town... known as Spring Hill And I woke up... eating alligator But it left me... feeling ill So my eyes... had seen the sunset From Atlanta... to Tampa Bay And I woke up... visiting my siblings And watched the sunrise... along the way

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/25/2021 9:06:00 AM

I'm glad, it seems that things went well as you watched sunrise along your way and woke up visiting your siblings. Nowadays big families have scattered to the four corners of the earth. Nice one Charles. Blessings/hugs Jennifer.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/7/2021 9:19:00 AM

WOW!!! What a creative story/write. I love how you did this. "Wonderful" Have a blessed day writing away...........

Gary Radice

Date: 9/26/2021 1:06:00 AM

Brilliant lyrics. Loved the fruit / place associations, particularly as this Brit didn't know, for example, that Georgia was famous for its peaches. I thought the last verse was great. Cheers - Gary

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/25/2021 8:03:00 PM

Love the serendipity of this one, Charlie!... Just don't die on us! OK?! Thanks, gw

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/25/2021 6:45:00 AM

Poetry is great therapy sometimes! You should have come for a visit. I now know that we share Georgia (where my parents were raised), Atlanta was my home for my kindergarten year and I live in Florida (east coast - seems your peps are west coast.) WELL ... now I need to know who picked you up after you landed safely? I flown many times on our continent and 4 round trips to Europe - I think safely crossing the Atlantic 8 times is enough! I enjoyed our conversation! Chatty me ... CayCay

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 9/23/2021 12:10:00 PM

Hello Charles, Enjoyed the lyric. have a safe trip. Enjoy your visits. Enjoy your day my friend.

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 9/22/2021 11:12:00 PM

Hello Charles ... nice lyrics. Be interesting to hear your song Charles - Lindsay

Charles Messina
Date: 9/23/2021 4:10:00 AM

Thank you, Lindsay. More lyrics to come...when I get back (lol) Have a nice weekend my friend!