Andrea Dietrich Poet Rhyme

If I Could Go Back - Collaboration

The challenge was to add one stanza into the sponsor's poem. This was my favorite one that he showed. I have italized the last stanza to show it is the little part that I added to Charles Messina's poem "If I Could Go Back":

As I'm looking through my window 
And I start to l look around
All the snow has melted 
I see toys left on the ground
 
A basket ball, a whiffle ball 
A glove and baseball bat 
A dirty lone blue mitten 
And a cotton ball wool hat
 
Candy wrappers and soda caps 
And a witches old corn broom 
And underneath the swing set 
Was a busted red balloon
 
Footsteps from the children 
Left imprinted in the dirt 
And in the leafless branchy bush 
Was a little boys lost shirt
 
Those times when we were children 
Sometimes bad and sometimes good 
I'd go back there in a heartbeat 
If I thought that I just could
 
A dirty lone blue mitten 
And a cotton ball wool hat 
A basket ball, a whiffle ball
A glove and a baseball bat
 
And underneath the swing set 
Was a busted red balloon 
Candy wrappers and soda caps 
And a witches old corn broom
 
And in the leafless branchy bush 
Was a little boys lost shirt 
Footsteps from the children 
Left imprinted in the dirt
 
Those times when we were children 
Sometimes bad and sometimes good 
I'd go back there in a heartbeat 
If I thought that I just could

I’d don the cotton ball wool hat
and give the whiffle ball a whack.
Then loud and strong I’d raise my voice
as friends and brothers I’d call back!

Aug. 21, 2018 for Charles Messina's Add A Stanza To My Poem Poetry Contest
Note: Here is a link to his poem. There you can see an interesting bio that goes with it . He grew up with many siblings just like I did.
https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/if_i_could_go_back_1012017

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Sara Kendrick August 29, 2018 at 4:13 PM Congrats on your winning work ..Way to go.. Sara

Gershon Wolf August 28, 2018 at 5:49 PM Buy your ticket and get on board... to go back, of course. Congrats on your win, Andrea! ~ Gershon

Eve Roper August 28, 2018 at 3:03 PM Love your addition to Charlie's poem, Andrea...Congratulations on your 2nd place win!

Joseph May August 28, 2018 at 8:43 AM Nice ending Andrea..Congrats on your win..

Charles Messina August 28, 2018 at 7:25 AM Andrea, I can't tell you how much I love the stanza you added to my poem. You nailed it perfectly. Also, thank you for adding the bio along with it, that's a beautiful thing. So much enjoyed! Thanks for entering my contest and a huge congratulations on your win! Charlie :)

Subimal Sinha-Roy August 28, 2018 at 3:39 AM Congratulations, Andrea on your win. Great addition to the poem.

Richard D Seal August 23, 2018 at 6:31 PM Hiya Petal, I think this is the first time I’ve ever been the first to comment on any poem,yay at last lol. I do share the sentiment of the writers poem and your addition, though I was always taught to put my toys etc away. There are many things we’d all love to do over again. Take care, Richard Andrea Dietrich August 26, 2018 at 4:02 PM thanks for being the only one to comment, Richard. I hope the sponsor of the contest likes it enough to place it. I had to post up four poems at once before my little trip to Chicago and it was for sure gonna be hardly read!!