If?

If I call you 'my dear',
do I presume too soon
that you are mine?

If to me you draw near
and you cause me to swoon...
Breakfast at nine?

If it seems very clear
we are meant to be one, 
all should be fine?

If there's reason to fear
it will not be much fun,
should we decline?

If it's just for the sheer
joy, pure - surpassed by none,
our love will shine.






Note on form: Five Dimeter Tercet Stanzas, 6-6-4 Syllables and A-B-C Rhyming Patterns

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Matthew Anish

Date: 8/27/2011 4:11:00 PM

Very original rhyme pattern here. I usually don't write poems that rhyme - with the recent "Incantaion" an exception. Keep writing the excellent verse. Peace & love Matthew Anish

Daver Austin

Date: 12/12/2010 10:14:00 AM

"If there's reason to fear - it will not be much fun." Yes! And this is most often the case. Interesting and sensible formulae you have here. Lots of food tor thought. Love, Dave

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/20/2010 6:03:00 AM

Good one..Glad that you explained the form..I will have to try one sometimes..Sara

Suresh Iyer

Date: 11/16/2010 11:20:00 PM

loved the way you have written. kept me thinking about my ifs :-)

John Loving Iii

Date: 11/13/2010 4:25:00 PM

where would you fit anger? is it love or fear? jhl

Rick Rucker

Date: 11/13/2010 1:05:00 PM

If it were not to be, would it not still be fun? Must we spend every second with "the one?" Two ships passing in the night, Can light each other with their light.

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 11/12/2010 12:17:00 PM

excellent Linda! I love what you've done with this. Simple yet surprising and complete with extraordinary form pattern (well at least for me on the form part!) Iknow you got it girl...just let it out. Asll far as "humility" goes.......I would be PROUD and Honored !!! hAHAHA Thought i'd throw a little ambiguity in virtue there....Seriously that would be lovely and remember me to the Almighty as I will you. : )