Andrea Dietrich Poet Senryu

Ice King

twenty minutes
with an ice cube in my palm. . . 
ice king wannabe

My Conclusion:

cold stinging torture
 becomes more bearable as. . .
ice turns to water

Insufficiently numbed. . .
my hand could now tolerate
a hole drilled through it


For Skat's ICE KING (in less than 10 lines) For the adventures one Poetry Contest

I really wanted to see how long it would take the cube to melt in my hand when I was laying out in the sun, around 100 degrees F. So I timed it and it took 20 minutes. It stung really bad for at least the first ten minutes and hurt all the way till the end but was much more bearable as it turned to water!! for me, this was like performing an experiment. I would not like to be the ice king.

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Debbie Guzzi November 7, 2013 at 4:05 PM I wanted you to think all the things you thought in the senryu Andie, it could have been play or rape. [PS you are coocoo LOl doing that with the ice!] Light & Love

Phyllis Babcock August 28, 2013 at 3:48 PM That would be darn cold on the hands holding that ice cube so long. Come visit me in the cold of winter and you feel like an ice cube. Congrats on your win. love phyl

Sara Kendrick August 22, 2013 at 12:59 PM Congrats on your great winning work..Uniquely creative..Sara

Richard Lamoureux August 19, 2013 at 6:08 PM Congratulations Andrea, you and Craig added a bit of humor. Andrea Dietrich August 19, 2013 at 6:37 PM glad you caught that. It was a pretty humorous challenge I thought!!

Poet Destroyer A August 19, 2013 at 4:56 PM Hi lovely Andrea, , love the win, and icy feeling after reading your poem. Congratulations... luv~ LINDA

Anne-Lise Andresen August 19, 2013 at 2:17 PM - It was nice to take part in this contest, I like your suggestion - very good poem. - Congratulations on a great win, Andrea! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Skat A August 19, 2013 at 2:03 PM HELLO ANDREA ! Thank you for the Ice King Adventure...... Enjoy my latest blog "I got chills they're multiplying" inspired by all winning poems. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=495082#comments (-: Congratulations :-) ~SKAT~

Debbie Duncan August 8, 2013 at 8:07 PM Ok ,, so I put it in the Fairy Dust" contest ,,, thought I don't see it posted there ;}

Lucilla Carrillo August 4, 2013 at 7:06 PM Nice poem, but I don't think I want to do that. Twenty minutes is a long time. good luck in the contest..... Lucilla

Richard D Seal July 31, 2013 at 6:03 PM You do some daft things Petal, children, if your watching, don't try this at home lol, Auntie Andrea's been very naughty for a grown up haha, especially the drilling part, believe me it doesn't work haha. Take care, Richard

Len Gasun July 28, 2013 at 12:13 AM Hello my very dear friend Adrea! You also did very well on this one.Your experimentation came out to be a perfect & excellent Senryu. I love it and so enjoyed. I wish you good luck and best wishes my dear friend. Have a blessed wkend to you and your love ones! Love lots and big big sweetest hugs, Leonora

Jack Horne July 27, 2013 at 2:34 PM will have to check out this contest, lol. great descriptions

Sara Kendrick July 26, 2013 at 3:07 PM Enjoyed reading your creative work..Interesting experiment that you tried..That hundred degree weather is not comfortable at all..I don't see how you stayed outside sunning in it..Thanks for the visits to my work..Sara

Joe Maverick July 26, 2013 at 1:19 PM A whacky enough experiment Andrea; however have enjoyed reading about your results and thoughts today, wishing you a top spot in Skats contest it must be better to enter something you have put yourself out to experience, hope you are doing well, Joe..'

Kash Poet July 26, 2013 at 8:24 AM Uri baba! 20 minutes!!I am going to try.But only when my son is not at home.Otherwise his expiriment on this will continue for 1 month.Very nice Senryu. Andrea Dietrich July 26, 2013 at 11:01 AM I'm dying to know how the experiment will be for YOU. It is not enjoyable!

Mitch White July 25, 2013 at 5:42 AM Hi sweetie, ty for reading my stuff. This looks painfully fun @#%! I might try it. Haha 20 min, oh boy.

Richard Ferry July 24, 2013 at 10:46 PM Hello Andrea: I`m sure another winners circle for you. Myself , rather have ice in my glass to numb the pain.Hope you do not have any power drills at your house.

Russell Sivey July 24, 2013 at 10:07 PM What an awesome and delightful write you have written here my friend! I really loved reading about how the melting ice is empowered by the Ice King! The pain that is ensued by the melting ice is quite powerful as it is, but after it becomes water there's no power left within the former ice within the Ice King! What an amazing piece, Great Work!!

Suzanne Delaney July 24, 2013 at 6:44 PM Good take on the challenge ...there is a typo in the last stanza. Good Luck in the contest my dear. SuZ

Jack Jordan July 24, 2013 at 3:59 PM Long ago I had a sadistic dentist tell me to grip an ice cube while he drilled, and I wouldn't feel the pain. It worked, but I never went back to him. You're very brave to be in the sun, ice cube or not. I turn onto the proverbial lobster. I left soupmail for you in response to your comment on my Tanka 3... Jack

Delysia Hendricks July 24, 2013 at 12:55 PM lol. You're a brave one, Andrea. I wouldn't try it because I can't handle cold. Good luck in the contest with this clever write. Licia :-)

Robert Johnson July 24, 2013 at 10:57 AM I'm like Daver. I think your mind was already numb. :) :) :)

Daver Austin July 24, 2013 at 9:31 AM Self torture - get help. Hardy harr, harr. Love, daver

Poet. Undertaker July 24, 2013 at 9:29 AM andrea really great. got a great sense of humor.wishes for a win. (:c Jenish

Poet Tacito July 24, 2013 at 7:59 AM Fantastic work on this! This is almost like a reminder that those who want to be on top of the world (like the King approach here), it can get lonely & hurt like hell up there. Excellent!

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