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I Shoulda Seen It Coming

I shoulda seen it coming, but blind I had to be. Otherwise, how did I end up here looking down. I’m looking down at ME and everybody in my life so dear. I shoulda seen it coming. I shoulda heard it too. How the heck did I wind up like this? There must have been the sound of choo choo choo. And vibrations – however could I miss? I shoulda seen it coming while on that track I stood, ear buds in while I was listening to loud music, feeling oh so good. Now it feels like on my face tears are glistening. Wow! I still can cry because my soul has a face and eyes to see from where I’m looking down at my closed coffin. Wish I could console my sobbing loved ones (glad to see they care!) Wish that they could see me now up here though my body down on earth got hit so hard! But I’m brand new in this new sphere! If I could, I’d tell them also – Grandpa hasn’t even changed a bit! Jan. 31, 2023 For the I Shoulda Seen It Comin' Poetry Contest of John Lawless

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Date: 2/2/2023 8:08:00 AM
From the earthly realms to heavenly heights, Very nicely penned Andrea
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Date: 2/2/2023 3:30:00 AM
... to discover it from a completely different angle ... a sad poem, Andrea - GL in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 2/1/2023 9:28:00 PM
A big wow! So original! Absolutely enjoyed the read
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Date: 2/1/2023 8:04:00 PM
Timless Andrea timeless.' All the best in the contest.)
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Date: 2/1/2023 7:08:00 PM
Oh, Andrea, you've made me cry! This is a skillfully-written, moving piece! Janice
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Date: 2/1/2023 3:36:00 PM
This is a gripping tale, Andrea. You conveyed it well through splendid images and flawless rhyming. Good luck in the contest. :)
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Date: 2/1/2023 1:39:00 PM
A horrible tragedy, yet a wonderful and soulful poem, Andrea
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Date: 2/1/2023 4:29:00 AM
Wonderful write … you took me on a journey with your words . What a perspective from above ! Love your creativity Andrea .Good luck in the contest . Big hugs my friend, Susan :)
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Date: 2/1/2023 3:06:00 AM
A pitiful accident, but a soulful write, Andrea:)
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Date: 2/1/2023 1:37:00 AM
Trains do not stop for anyone. Although a suicide, you write in an amazing way. And looking down, how can you not notice your relatives in grief for your demise. Best for a win.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/1/2023 12:00:00 PM
not a suicide. The person was happily listening to music and just standing on a train track like an idiot.

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