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I see you

 I
see
What floats
behind those
blurry eyes, from a
million seas between you and I, 
weary wounds, Broken ballads from torn tears, she was your
once upon a moon, that spared you no dew dreams to wish underneath a star gazing night.

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Ink Empress

January 27, 2024 at 5:13 AM

I loved this, the way your words flow and also how you’ve expressed here is brilliant and so well delivered. I especially love the way you started the fibonacci got me hooked and intrigued to read more, and the ending is stunning! So beautiful and deeply moving! Congratulations on your win. Well deserved. Thank you for sharing

Richard Lamoureux

January 18, 2024 at 3:40 PM

Yes a lot of guys don’t take time to properly grieve a lost relationship. It is so unfair to the women they are dating. The wise ones it seems can see it in their eyes. Well expressed.

Silent One

January 17, 2024 at 11:54 AM

What floats behind it??? Can you tell me please? Kundalini eyes? No???? I know this is about your beloved or ex beloved... I like the line about broken ballads.. this is very poetic and I see you have tried very hard to impress Kundalini, sorry, I mean Empress... the last two lines are excellent and I hope you place first with this one... all the best..

Lioness Onpaper

January 18, 2024 at 3:00 AM

Hahahah … kundalini saktiiii… this is on a scenario where … a guy still not being over his ex… n while he is not over her he trying to start up a new relationship… I see it in his eyes how he still is broken by her… hahahah … kundalini saktii called the whole thing twisted aeeee … hahahahhahahah..