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I see you

I see What floats behind those blurry eyes, from a million seas between you and I, weary wounds, Broken ballads from torn tears, she was your once upon a moon, that spared you no dew dreams to wish underneath a star gazing night.

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Ink Empress

Date: 1/27/2024 5:13:00 AM

I loved this, the way your words flow and also how you’ve expressed here is brilliant and so well delivered. I especially love the way you started the fibonacci got me hooked and intrigued to read more, and the ending is stunning! So beautiful and deeply moving! Congratulations on your win. Well deserved. Thank you for sharing

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/18/2024 3:40:00 PM

Yes a lot of guys don’t take time to properly grieve a lost relationship. It is so unfair to the women they are dating. The wise ones it seems can see it in their eyes. Well expressed.

Silent One

Date: 1/17/2024 11:54:00 AM

What floats behind it??? Can you tell me please? Kundalini eyes? No???? I know this is about your beloved or ex beloved... I like the line about broken ballads.. this is very poetic and I see you have tried very hard to impress Kundalini, sorry, I mean Empress... the last two lines are excellent and I hope you place first with this one... all the best..

Lioness Onpaper
Date: 1/18/2024 3:00:00 AM

Hahahah … kundalini saktiiii… this is on a scenario where … a guy still not being over his ex… n while he is not over her he trying to start up a new relationship… I see it in his eyes how he still is broken by her… hahahah … kundalini saktii called the whole thing twisted aeeee … hahahahhahahah..

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 1/17/2024 7:13:00 AM

Awwwww stargazing here and reading your poem . So beautiful

Tom Woody
Date: 1/17/2024 7:52:00 AM

Buh buh? How cute

Lioness Onpaper
Date: 1/17/2024 7:27:00 AM

Awwwn .. u stargazing aeee buh buh … let’s have ice cream aeee

Tom Woody

Date: 1/17/2024 5:41:00 AM

Poignant poetry in few words. Some never quite get over a former love, even when they meet someone new and exciting

Lioness Onpaper
Date: 1/17/2024 7:28:00 AM

Indeed.. some never do.. thank you um glad you enjoyed this piece