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I See Fire

Long Day at work
He returns
as a red-eyed wolf

Quiet room
and shiny desks
His minds keep busy

Eyes staring
on wet pavements
No more Fire

Then I See You
crow's feet landing on my eyes
Fired Up!

Messages conveyed
even a thick glass
cannot stop your anger

There is Fire 
in all working people
They all need a spark plug

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Created 12th May 2014
For Poem Contest Sponsored by: Poet Destroyer A

Copyright © Lily Twinkle | Year Posted 2014

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Liam Mcdaid Date: 1/13/2016 7:24:00 PM Powerful piece of writing I must say Login to Reply

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 9/6/2014 8:00:00 PM Excellent write! This is great stuff! Thoroughly enjoyed your work! Pandita Login to Reply

Active Reader Date: 7/3/2014 7:28:00 AM Thank you very much, thats lovely :) I love ourfamouspoets.com Login to Reply Lily Twinkle Date: 7/9/2014 9:47:00 AM Thank you

Shadow Hamilton Date: 5/18/2014 4:51:00 AM deep write Lily and great pen congrats on win hugs Login to Reply Lily Twinkle Date: 5/18/2014 11:09:00 AM I'm pleasantly surprised too! Thanks Shadow for reading this ;)

Paul Callus Date: 5/17/2014 4:32:00 PM Great set of senryu, Lily, especially the4th and 6th. Congrats on a deserved win. // paul Login to Reply Lily Twinkle Date: 5/18/2014 11:10:00 AM Thank you Paul for reading and commenting ;)

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 5/17/2014 5:02:00 AM Awesome write, loved this. Congratulations on the win, Lily Login to Reply Lily Twinkle Date: 5/18/2014 11:10:00 AM Thank you Dr. Ram for reading and commenting ;)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 5/16/2014 1:58:00 AM Great masterpiece Lily ! Loved the ending the most ! Congrats on huge win ! Login to Reply Lily Twinkle Date: 5/18/2014 11:11:00 AM Thank you Dr.Upma for reading and commenting ;)

Poet Destroyer A Date: 5/16/2014 12:12:00 AM Hi Lily, Congratulations!!! Thank you for supporting my contest... Always~ Linda Login to Reply Lily Twinkle Date: 5/18/2014 11:14:00 AM Thank you Linda for the opportunity to write in your contest! I'm trying to familiarize myself with this website ;) I enjoyed writing in contests.

Brooke Dylan Date: 5/15/2014 9:06:00 AM Lily... wow I love the ending ... great poetry.... plus Then I See You crow's feet landing on my eyes Fired Up! awesome lines... a true artist you are hugs Brooke Login to Reply Lily Twinkle Date: 5/18/2014 11:15:00 AM Thank you so much Brooke for your very encouraging words ;) writing is cathartic for me... Lol