Naomi Jones Poet I do not know?

I Could See the Sun

I could see the sun
I start grabbing at it
Trying to move up closer to it
So I can feel the rays on my face
And restore air back to my lungs
The faster I waved my arms
The more it seems that I am not getting anywhere
Running out of breath
Can’t hold it much longer
The salty water stings my eyes
But I can still
Still see the sun
Praying that I can hold out
Because the sun is getting bigger by each stroke
I am starting to feel the heat
At a steady pace I keep on moving up
Closer and closer
Bigger and bigger
I see the sun
Finally my face feels the cool breeze
I fill my lungs with air
I feel the sun

Now where is the land

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Skat A May 10, 2015 at 10:52 AM Naomi :) Congratulations on having your poem featured this Mothers Day. SKAT love

Funom Makama May 8, 2015 at 9:20 AM great lines, wonderful expressions. What better way for this message to flow? Naomi Jones May 8, 2015 at 9:21 AM thank you

Anne-Lise Andresen May 8, 2015 at 8:29 AM - A lovely poem, Naomi :) - Welkommen to P- Soup - I wish you a wonderful weekend, with many smiles and sunshine - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Naomi Jones May 8, 2015 at 8:32 AM Thank you so much. Have a wonderful weekend as well.

Skat A May 6, 2015 at 10:10 AM Naomi, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT Naomi Jones May 8, 2015 at 8:33 AM Thanks for the warm Welcoming. Thank you for liking my poem as well.

Richard Jordan May 5, 2015 at 2:34 PM Hi Naomi. A strong image, well rendered, with a surprise ending. Enjoyed your first poem. Thanks. Naomi Jones May 5, 2015 at 2:39 PM Thank you Mr. Jordan

Poet Destroyer A May 5, 2015 at 2:32 PM why worry about land, you got the sun on your side. I would love to feel the sun like this, Love the poem Naomi, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy 2015, with New Poet Friends @-> LINDA <-@ Naomi Jones May 5, 2015 at 2:41 PM Ms. Linda Thank you for the welcoming. I LOVE poetry. I am sure I will have fun. Thank you again