Brian Davey Poet Couplet

I Breathe Death

I breathe my last breath. will and testament
       Consciously aware of what comes next...Death

So I breathe and savor the cool wind within
       Smile as it fills my lungs but never again

So I breathe as a tear drop falls out of my eyes
       Lifting upwards through clouds and blue skies

So I breathe just one of so many breaths
       It's time, drifting towards my one and only death



Written for contest "I Breathe..." hosted by Ink Empress
                              11/17/2024

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Ink Empress November 29, 2024 at 3:30 AM Dear brian, what a hauntingly soul hitting take on the prompt, very well written and flows in such a seamless manner , i loved especially “ So I breathe and savor the cool wind within Smile as it fills my lungs but never again“ heartfelt! Loved that, thank you for sharing and for writing on the prompt. Congratulations on your win. Brian Davey December 5, 2024 at 9:35 PM Thank you so much for your praise and placement I appreciate you and your input. look forward to the next one

Andrea Dietrich November 19, 2024 at 7:45 PM Oh Brian this is so lovely. But please read the contest rules. You need to add a word to the title something like I breathe death? Or something different. Hojp to see you on the winner list. Brian Davey November 19, 2024 at 9:00 PM Thank you for letting me know I changed it in time I think not that I like the title better with death at the end of it but I don't want to get disqualified over a technicality. Thanks for reading and your always sound advice you have saved me a couple of times in years past in the same sort of situation