I have just removed the wording 'it was' from the 5th stanza re-placing them with the word 'Hidden' I have been meaning to do it for the last two years, just got round to it at last.'
13th 11th 2017
To win is the trying..!' gainst despairs blank stare, a wounded earth still rolls on..! Midst the throes of territorial vying.. Shows our shattered crystal the counsel of despair As the pales; of circumvention, invade earth's free sod and air, Oh.! such power we covet To maintain..! what is "right?" what is yours.. can be theirs" or is it ours..? should we fight..? Yes it tears through our city's this division reprised, To the call of soulless ambition, destruction quickens in stride, And! yet not new its existence..) "for know ye satan he is a liar" Though hidden deep in shadow; was to emerge its sly desire. Yet how ask us "innocent's" & why should this be? Whilst we gaze upon its sickness and water the seeds..! So we stand without reason, or we lay down condemned, Yet open hearts to salvation; on Jesus depend, Call his name now in season) let the fetters free fall, The Miracle is "willing" none should perish is all..!
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