Notes About The Poem

(True story. Last year, I saw it as I left my car to go inside my house. Then I went to my kitchen window, where probably the same bird came to my kitchen window and quickly vanished again as I did the dishes!)

Hummingbird

a hummingbird's wings

rotating before my eyes . .  .

my sweetest startle


Aug. 16, 2018 for Tania Kitchin's Hummingbird Haiku Contest
Now for Brian Strand's Hi-Ku(3) Poetry Contest
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Maverick Avatar
May 24, 2021 at 11:32 AM
flashs of brilliance here Andrea, & That hummingbirds not the only One with it on the block methinks. ''
Gentry Avatar
August 21, 2018 at 11:18 AM
Congratulations on your win. A few years ago, every morning my husband drank his coffee outside on the porch. One would come and sit on the rim of his coffee cup. It happened several times that summer. They are fascinating.
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 20, 2018 at 5:22 PM
My ex-husbands stepmother fed humming birds so often she got one to eat out of her hand. I have the amazing picture somewhere of it. They are like no other bird on earth. Loved your haiku and congratulations on your win Andrea! : )
Arowolo Avatar
August 20, 2018 at 4:51 AM
Lovely write. Congrats on your superb win in this contest... Andrea.
Waters Avatar
August 19, 2018 at 1:53 AM
wow - wonderful moment - captured. Congrats on winner.
Gauthier Avatar
August 18, 2018 at 10:37 AM
A lovely surreal moment in time well captured with this winner, Andrea. Congrats.
Richards Avatar
August 18, 2018 at 10:11 AM
These are the little moments we must watch for when needing some beautiful image to inspire a new poem! Well done, Andrea!!
Moorman Avatar
August 18, 2018 at 9:40 AM
These little 'hummers' are generally unafraid of humans who take the time to feed them and not startle them. I have had them literally come so close I could feel the 'breeze' generated by their wings. Congrats on your win.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
August 18, 2018 at 8:43 AM
Sweet haiku! Congratulations on your win :) xomo!
Kitchin Avatar
August 18, 2018 at 5:26 AM
Nice imagery and I enjoyed your story with it, they are a sweet startle, congratulations on your win in the contest!
Anish Avatar
August 17, 2018 at 6:29 PM
Excellent image of nature here. You stuck to 5 7 5 which is all to the good. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Allison Avatar
August 17, 2018 at 2:09 AM
What a wonderful moment Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
Ashley Avatar
August 16, 2018 at 9:55 PM
Oh such a sweet and treasured moment, Andrea. A lovely haiku and a great last line. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
Rodrigues Avatar
August 16, 2018 at 7:06 PM
So cute including the story!
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