Hot Summer Day ----- Contest Entry

Hydrants open; the waters gush and flood
the burning road. The children cheer and run
in suits, to feel the flowing cold. While mom
and pop stand side by side, the neighbors prom-
enade, and Mary Jack and Adam splash,
as Becky cools her feet. The Conners dash
with flapping towels, into the flooded lane.
DeMarco tries his best to swim, but blames
the cobble stones. Beside a dirty bin,
a boy stands all alone. His cheeks are thin
and pale; he's almost skin and bone. His eyes
go wide, as little Leslie leaves the light
to take him by the hand, and leads him back
amongst her friends. We all remember Zack.

9-3-2017
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Canerdy Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 9:37 PM
Very creative and moving--Congrats, Jack. Janice
Webster Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 10:08 PM
thank you, Janice
Medders Tobechi Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 8:33 PM
It's as if you are in the picture with everyone you know. Well done and creative write. Congratulations.
Webster Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 8:45 PM
Thank you, Janis; I'd hoped it might touch that feeling.
Hoffman Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 8:18 PM
Congratulations on your win too Jack! I like how you personalized your poem with the little kids names!~Che :)
Webster Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 8:42 PM
thank you, Cheryl :)
Pandit Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 6:45 PM
Congrats Jack!
Webster Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 6:51 PM
thanks Vijay
Smith Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 6:23 PM
Congrats Jack, great imagery :)
Webster Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 6:42 PM
thanks Gary :)
Roper Avatar
September 17, 2017 at 5:54 PM
Thank you, Jack , for entering my contest. .... Congratulations on your win... Hugs Eve ~`*
Webster Avatar
September 18, 2017 at 6:40 PM
thanks, Eve!
One Avatar
September 16, 2017 at 11:56 AM
Great use of words.. well written Jack
Webster Avatar
September 16, 2017 at 12:09 PM
Thank you, Silent One.
Rodd Avatar
September 16, 2017 at 9:25 AM
Such an exciting time when they'd open the hydrants. I remember all the kids rushing out of their houses on our block. Thanks for the memories!
Webster Avatar
September 16, 2017 at 10:27 AM
I'm so glad you liked it :) The prompt for the Hot Summer Day contest is a picture of kids in a street playing in the water from the hydrant. I think the contest is still open :)
Ashley Avatar
September 14, 2017 at 8:51 PM
LOL, beyond giggles now.., You're too funny! That was good Jack! :)
Webster Avatar
September 14, 2017 at 9:05 PM
;D
Ashley Avatar
September 14, 2017 at 7:22 PM
Ohh what a sad end to the poem. An excellent write Jack. Well done in rhyme and content. Good luck in the contest.
Webster Avatar
September 14, 2017 at 8:34 PM
"Your honor, I plead guilty to involuntary prosodicide due to too much volta-ge. RIP, Zach."
Ashley Avatar
September 14, 2017 at 7:49 PM
lol! Your reply has me giggling.., yes, letting Zack slip through the cracks,lol, really does pack an emotional punch!
Webster Avatar
September 14, 2017 at 7:31 PM
XD oh, no! I guess the last phrase is too ambiguous. It does sort of sound like he died or something, doesn't it? Was trying to go for reminiscing on the day he joined leslie's group of friends XD lol I really let Zack slip through the cracks, didn't i? Oh, boy... I'm glad it's still emotionally effective even if it wasnt the happy ending I intended... alas I really appreciate your feedback. Thank you :)
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