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Hot Summer Day

Mad as loons in the midday heat Hydrants open, oh the treat. Screaming, laughing, splashing too Bystanders enjoying the hullabaloo. Joyous children having fun Cooling off beneath the Sun, Smiling faces, having a riot. Parents wishing they could try it. Entry for Hot Summer Day contest Sponsored by Eve Roper 14/9/2017

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Jack Webster

Date: 9/18/2017 6:11:00 PM

great tension/ excitement in the short lines, very playful rhythm/ rhyme. congratulations, Gary!

Gary Smith
Date: 9/18/2017 6:21:00 PM

Thank you Jack :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/18/2017 4:52:00 PM

I love your exuberant, WINNING poem, Gary. Janice

Gary Smith
Date: 9/18/2017 5:19:00 PM

Thank you Janice :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/18/2017 2:52:00 PM

Congratulations Gary ! Fun! :)

Gary Smith
Date: 9/18/2017 2:57:00 PM

Thank you Heidi :)

Charlie Smith

Date: 9/18/2017 10:45:00 AM

You know that's true, congratulations Gary...

Gary Smith
Date: 9/18/2017 11:05:00 AM

Thank you Charlie :)

Eve Roper

Date: 9/17/2017 5:35:00 PM

Thank you, Gary, for entering my contest. ..Your entry described what I was looking for, the children having a blast in the hot day around a water hydrant.. Congratulations on your win... Hugs Eve ~`*

Gary Smith
Date: 9/17/2017 5:48:00 PM

Thank you Eve :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/14/2017 7:03:00 PM

I agree with Jan, your final couplet made me smile as well. Excellently written Gary and a joy to read this evening. Good luck in the contest.

Gary Smith
Date: 9/15/2017 2:16:00 AM

Thank you Susan :)

Jan Allison

Date: 9/14/2017 4:41:00 PM

Your final couplet made me smile Gary as i to sense the people in the picture would have loved to join in:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Gary Smith
Date: 9/14/2017 4:41:00 PM

Thank you Jan :)