Gary Smith Poet Couplet

Hot Summer Day

Mad as loons in the midday heat
Hydrants open, oh the treat.

Screaming, laughing, splashing too
Bystanders enjoying the hullabaloo.

Joyous children having fun
Cooling off beneath the Sun,

Smiling faces, having a riot.
Parents wishing they could try it.





Entry for Hot Summer Day contest
Sponsored by Eve Roper
14/9/2017

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Jack Webster September 18, 2017 at 6:11 PM great tension/ excitement in the short lines, very playful rhythm/ rhyme. congratulations, Gary! Gary Smith September 18, 2017 at 6:21 PM Thank you Jack :)

Janice Canerdy September 18, 2017 at 4:52 PM I love your exuberant, WINNING poem, Gary. Janice Gary Smith September 18, 2017 at 5:19 PM Thank you Janice :)

Heidi Sands September 18, 2017 at 2:52 PM Congratulations Gary ! Fun! :) Gary Smith September 18, 2017 at 2:57 PM Thank you Heidi :)

Charlie Smith September 18, 2017 at 10:45 AM You know that's true, congratulations Gary... Gary Smith September 18, 2017 at 11:05 AM Thank you Charlie :)

Eve Roper September 17, 2017 at 5:35 PM Thank you, Gary, for entering my contest. ..Your entry described what I was looking for, the children having a blast in the hot day around a water hydrant.. Congratulations on your win... Hugs Eve ~`* Gary Smith September 17, 2017 at 5:48 PM Thank you Eve :)

Susan Ashley September 14, 2017 at 7:03 PM I agree with Jan, your final couplet made me smile as well. Excellently written Gary and a joy to read this evening. Good luck in the contest. Gary Smith September 15, 2017 at 2:16 AM Thank you Susan :)

Jan Allison September 14, 2017 at 4:41 PM Your final couplet made me smile Gary as i to sense the people in the picture would have loved to join in:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Gary Smith September 14, 2017 at 4:41 PM Thank you Jan :)