Dragged this out of my slush pile wasn't convinced about it...
But... it costs nothing to give it an airing!
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When the sun shines down on a concrete town And no one dares put both feet down It’s hop from one foot to the other Dancing like you’re your grandmother How does concrete get so hot I didn’t know how hot it got I got stuck in the parking lot My tyres melted: four wheels shot I saw flamingoes in the zoo I’m doing what flamingoes do With one leg up and one leg down I’m standing in a concrete town So here I stand in this hot street I could pour water on my feet I think perhaps I’d rather choose To buy myself a pair of shoes
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