Honey Bees

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This is actually a Villonnet, but that option isn't available so I chose Rhyme.
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Iambic tetrameter

How humbly hover honey bees
betwixt and 'tween as flowers preen
in April's opalescent sheen
and petals palpitate in breeze.

Beside an arbor's graceful ease
of roses splayed in promenade
with poppies sprayed across the glade
how humbly hover honey bees.

While lilies lilt beneath the trees
the sunlight dapples daffodils
that pose in pots upon the sills
as petals palpitate in breeze.

How humbly hover honey bees,
purveyors of the pollen yield.
As petals palpitate in breeze
they fend the fragrant flower field. 

8/24/19

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 12/21/2019 4:36:00 AM

Sincere congratulations on your Honorable Mention in Brian's contest, Dale - best wishes and blessings to you and yours for a Merry Christmas! Keep up the great work, my friend! :o)

Brenda Chiri

Date: 12/21/2019 4:21:00 AM

Dale congrats on your placement!;)

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 8/31/2019 5:55:00 PM

Andrea, that would be surprising, if Dale didn't. I don't know about the readers whose English is their native language, but for me it's kind of a magic. I have read this poem aloud several times and something makes me read more. This must be the magic I told) P.S.: I guess there's no point congratulating Dale. He knows he's a magician without my comments.

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 9/1/2019 9:01:00 AM

Thanks very much for the kind words, Kurt.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/28/2019 3:29:00 PM

I see you won the contest with this. Congratulations

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 8/27/2019 7:19:00 PM

a wonderful Wow! A fav. Congratulations on your win.

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 8/27/2019 7:21:00 PM

Thanks so much, Jeanne.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/27/2019 7:06:00 PM

I say back the same to you. Beautiful and so well metered! The form seems so much like pantoum/villanelle,quatern, all those types that repeat lines. I love them all.