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Holding On

I am searching for a missing peace of my heart It has been, hurt on, kicked on, stabbed with a knife I've been crushed on, and torn up inside Always looking for that magical rainbow inside. My world turned backward, should be going forward Things went wrong, pieces that fell apart places where the darkness hides I take each moment, do the best I can. A smile on my face , never showing the depth A heart that crashes, ever ready to run Feeling the soul, not knowing where it's been Tasting very moment best as I can. Live everyday no matter where bitterness lies I am just another face in the crowd You do not walk the mile in my shoes Don't tell me to keep my feet on the ground Keeping my feet on the ground Have another look around This is just a time in my life -----a time in my life----- 04-18-11 now I need some lyrics

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Anne Rutherford

Date: 5/6/2011 5:59:00 AM

I love it Phyllis, you captured it with a positive outlook .Superb writing . Anne

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 4/29/2011 12:57:00 AM

~Soulful piece. Unfortunately, I have notebooks and shoe boxes full of writes of this subject matter. It hurts. ~JSLambert

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/25/2011 5:09:00 PM

Phyllis, no one can really walk in our shoes or know what is in our minds. People say things like "keep your feet on the ground" because they don't know what else to say. God helps provide guidance, but we have to make our own choices when dealing with crises. If I were a musician, I would love to write music for your lyrics. Absolutely stunning! Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/25/2011 3:55:00 PM

PHyl. I am happy to see this new poem of yours. Sorry I didn't see it until just now. FUll of your heart and soul. YOu are just that kind of poet. thanks so much for all the comments you gave me today. I want to comment more to you but will have to return to it. It's 5 p.m and I gotta finally get home to joe. Luv, andrea

George Aul

Date: 4/25/2011 11:34:00 AM

Thank you for the comment........George

James Foulk

Date: 4/25/2011 10:57:00 AM

thank you Phyllis for reading and commenting on Beetle Sees Daylight, Something Beautiful and Quite Little Child.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/23/2011 9:56:00 PM

wonderful Phyllis.. im keeping my feet on the ground.... I had fun reading your poem, take care and have your self a happy and safe Easter! always p.d.

Audrey Haick

Date: 4/18/2011 2:01:00 PM

A beautifully haunting song, Phyllis. Brilliantly penned. Made me share a tear but as you said, "...This is just a time in my life---a time in my life---" Great work! Goes to my favs. Love, Annalise

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/18/2011 11:49:00 AM

a song in the key of life's hearty melody... just lovely, pgyll! :) huggs, nette

Wilfredo Derequito

Date: 4/18/2011 11:04:00 AM

Here's an example, Paul McCartney's lines: "Yesterday, all my troubles seem so far away (12); Now it looks as though they're here to stay (9); Oh I believe in yesterday (8). Suddenly, I'm not half the man I used to be (12); There's a shadow hanging over me (9) Oh yesterday came suddenly (8)..." Notice the similarity in the number of syllables (12, 9, 8) in the 1st and 2nd verses which makes it easy to keep the cadence (meter) from one verse to the next. Try it, Phyl...and good luck.

James Foulk

Date: 4/18/2011 10:51:00 AM

a great write, enjoyed reading.

Wilfredo Derequito

Date: 4/18/2011 10:46:00 AM

I used to write some music, Phyl, in fact some of the pieces I have here in Soup are actually songs, albeit unpublished. Here's one clue I can offer: right syllabication (metering) are important in songwriting. For example, if you have say, 10 syllables in the first line of a verse, then try to maintain about that same number of syllables in the first line of the next verses, etc. Then you will be able to maintain the right cadence. It's tough writing a song if the syllables greatly vary.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 4/18/2011 10:14:00 AM

May need changes to this but will try and see if we can put some music this. If anyone writes music I could do with a few clues as to how to do. Thanks Phyl