Holding Hands

Light,weightless feelings
Spongy thoughts floating
Soaring like dry sea weed,jacaranda seed
Sick
Thoughts of you
Something
Something that wants to get out
Emotions,warmth
Listening.
To your call
I follow
Coz love,loves breaks
Love squeezes past barriers
Dreams,thoughts
Remind me of past love
Future love. love that could be.
But flowers have
Lights have dimmed
Lights that shone
If lights really shone
May a light shine
A sunrise
Orange and red
Shimmering water
Sand below my feet
I touch you.
My ever green vine
On which love grows.

Let’s roll,let’s skip
Let’s greet the sun
With a splash of salty water
Silence
Deep.
Deep slumber
At the earth’s beginning.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 11/12/2011 7:33:00 PM
There is something about this poem that attracts the attention of readers. Good flow and clever use of metaphors is some of its qualities. Thanks for sharing. -Mohammad
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Date: 12/2/2008 8:47:00 AM
Thank you all for the comments, appreciated.
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Date: 12/2/2008 5:46:00 AM
The poem surges ahead and sweeps the reader along. The ending is intriguing. It's one of those poems that calls you back for more than one reading.
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Date: 12/1/2008 5:18:00 PM
I enjoyed this very much my new poetry friend. The flow is done so well and the theme runs throughout the piece never losing a step. Thank you for your comments on my work today. Chris.
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Date: 12/1/2008 1:58:00 PM
I like this very much. Seems be some very clever use of evolution in both the development of the poem and in the metaphor of its content. Great stuff. Love, Nigel
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Date: 12/1/2008 10:26:00 AM
Nicely flows. Interesting. Easy to follow...
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