JC Brul Poet Nonet

Her Renunciation

She walks barefooted in spiny shore
as dusk descends to snatch her heart;
Bloody feet turn curling foams
into hot crimson red~
melting her footprints
and her wild dreams
into smoke
that kills
her.
She
dances
with the moon
as the tide dries;
Her dolesome heart hails
on nocturnal murmurs
echoing from northern lights
as seabirds return to their nests;
She jumps in and succumbs to the sea.

14 June 2021

All Yours (June 14) Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Brian Strand
1st place

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Caren Krutsinger August 16, 2021 at 9:20 AM There is such a misery to this write. "Her dolesome heart hails on nocturnal murmurs echoing from northern lights" I hope all is well

Susan Ashley July 4, 2021 at 6:13 PM Dearest JCB, your profound pen spills with dark, rich, palpable pain and anguish. The dolesome emotions portrayed in your vivid imagery is absolutely breathtaking, and I love the use of the word "dolesome" too. I adore your poignant last line, a grand finale for this sadly beautiful and haunting piece. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Aniruddha Pathak June 15, 2021 at 9:39 PM Ah, feelings pouring out from the deepest recesses of heart, as profound as the sea in which 'she' jumps to merge with it. You deserve the first place, congrats, dear poet Jez.

Gershon Wolf June 15, 2021 at 3:05 PM One with the sea and its myriad rhythms -- she. Dark, poignant lines, JCB. Haunting verse here. Kudos, Gershon

Andrea Dietrich June 15, 2021 at 2:30 PM wow, such a sad one but written with such fantastic imagery. The last line really sums it up so well.

Robert Lindley June 15, 2021 at 10:36 AM A true image laden feast of dark vestiges of those sensual phantoms that tempt men into the dark abyss. Truly a first rate creation and very deserving of the first place given. That my blog on darkness in poetry has born some fruit is indeed a wonderful gift. A fav- a true and dark-cast glowing gem. God bless..

Christuraj Alex June 15, 2021 at 7:59 AM Wow. You are Great.

Alexis Y. June 14, 2021 at 7:04 PM WoW! JBC, You have penned a well-written entry for the contest—good dark images throughout your poem. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Victor Buhagiar June 14, 2021 at 11:46 AM Wow. I love dark poems. I should post a couple. Best for a win.

Sam Kauffman June 14, 2021 at 10:33 AM Powerful images JCB. Powerful and sad all at the same time. The bloodied soul leaving crimson footprints - traces - is a profound image. Wonderfully composed. Congratulations on your win! :D'

Regina Mcintosh June 14, 2021 at 6:44 AM Wonderful writing. Breathtaking. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina

Rama Balasubramanian June 13, 2021 at 11:15 PM Beautifully captured