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Her Renunciation

She walks barefooted in spiny shore as dusk descends to snatch her heart; Bloody feet turn curling foams into hot crimson red~ melting her footprints and her wild dreams into smoke that kills her. She dances with the moon as the tide dries; Her dolesome heart hails on nocturnal murmurs echoing from northern lights as seabirds return to their nests; She jumps in and succumbs to the sea. 14 June 2021 All Yours (June 14) Poetry Contest Sponsored by Brian Strand 1st place

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/16/2021 9:20:00 AM

There is such a misery to this write. "Her dolesome heart hails on nocturnal murmurs echoing from northern lights" I hope all is well

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/4/2021 6:13:00 PM

Dearest JCB, your profound pen spills with dark, rich, palpable pain and anguish. The dolesome emotions portrayed in your vivid imagery is absolutely breathtaking, and I love the use of the word "dolesome" too. I adore your poignant last line, a grand finale for this sadly beautiful and haunting piece. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Aniruddha Pathak

Date: 6/15/2021 9:39:00 PM

Ah, feelings pouring out from the deepest recesses of heart, as profound as the sea in which 'she' jumps to merge with it. You deserve the first place, congrats, dear poet Jez.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/15/2021 3:05:00 PM

One with the sea and its myriad rhythms -- she. Dark, poignant lines, JCB. Haunting verse here. Kudos, Gershon

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/15/2021 2:30:00 PM

wow, such a sad one but written with such fantastic imagery. The last line really sums it up so well.

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/15/2021 10:36:00 AM

A true image laden feast of dark vestiges of those sensual phantoms that tempt men into the dark abyss. Truly a first rate creation and very deserving of the first place given. That my blog on darkness in poetry has born some fruit is indeed a wonderful gift. A fav- a true and dark-cast glowing gem. God bless..

Christuraj Alex

Date: 6/15/2021 7:59:00 AM

Wow. You are Great.

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/14/2021 7:04:00 PM

WoW! JBC, You have penned a well-written entry for the contest—good dark images throughout your poem. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/14/2021 11:46:00 AM

Wow. I love dark poems. I should post a couple. Best for a win.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/14/2021 10:33:00 AM

Powerful images JCB. Powerful and sad all at the same time. The bloodied soul leaving crimson footprints - traces - is a profound image. Wonderfully composed. Congratulations on your win! :D'

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 6/14/2021 6:44:00 AM

Wonderful writing. Breathtaking. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 6/13/2021 11:15:00 PM

Beautifully captured