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Heavy Metal

When the setting sun settles
Upon the weeping western skies
That's when I earn my medals
Hearth fires from smoldering eyes

Crystalline orbs glow like rare art
Gemstones shine light on my eyes
Mining ore from cast-iron heart
Molten metal melts the skies

Smelting, my weeping western eyes
Gemstones spark life in my heart
Heavy metal forged from her skies
Casts raw iron into art

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Ghairo Daniels

September 20, 2025 at 9:41 PM

I’m not sure which version I like better. This is a lighter version. They each have a different but valid feel. My view is that heavy & light are both important, but many poets only like lighter versions of their poems. I do perceive that our poems become lighter as we progress on our journey, or reflect a transient mood to be captured. (Yes, rhymes with Cairo, but G is guttural & h is silent. Shortened version of my full name.)have a good day/night.

Ghairo Daniels

September 20, 2025 at 3:45 PM

Powerful Imagery, Randy. Excellent last line- very unusual. Blessings your way for your poetry.

Randy Freie

September 20, 2025 at 7:34 PM

Does it rhyme with Cairo? Well, I rethought my poem and did some editing. I think if you reread it, you'll like this version better. I do. Thanks again baby sister!

Randy Freie

September 20, 2025 at 4:43 PM

Excellent first name! Very unique! How do you pronounce it? Thanks for the feedback, I was afraid that I being too redundant with my diction.

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