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Thanks to Richard Lamoureux for inspiring me to write in this Musette form:-)

Heartbreak

Goodbye
I’ll hide my tears
Won’t cry

Crying
Heart is breaking
Tears fall

Falling
In love with you
Was bliss

Blissful
Together forever
You lied

Lying
Sealing our fate
So long

Longing
For the right one
Some day

2,4,2 non rhyming form
Contest:Mussetle Train
Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux


11~30~ 2014


Title changed from heartbreak to Heartbroken for

''H'' Contest, New or Old Poems Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Constance La France

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Poet Destroyer A Date: 1/15/2015 11:53:00 PM weeee! back here again... you are welcome... PD Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/16/2015 2:33:00 AM :-) xx Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A Date: 1/11/2015 9:02:00 PM lovely win...PD Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/12/2015 1:04:00 AM Thanks Linda:-) Hugs Jan x

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 1/9/2015 10:39:00 PM You wrote a fantastic poem in this challenging form, Jan...from love to heartbreak to hope, I enjoyed every stage. Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/10/2015 4:05:00 AM Thanks Rhonda I had fun with this challenging form Richard found for us:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler Date: 1/8/2015 12:44:00 AM I think you've done a great job with this difficult new form. The words and images all flow so smoothly together... Congrats on the win, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/8/2015 7:50:00 AM Thanks so much Kelly I really enjoyed the challenge Richard set us:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kayod5 Kayode Date: 1/5/2015 11:48:00 PM Congrats on the win Jan...huggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/6/2015 1:16:00 AM Thanks so much Kayod5:-) Hugs Jan xx

Earl Schumacker Date: 1/5/2015 7:42:00 PM Hi Jan, Very nice...sad...but nice. Excellent win. Solid structure. Good for you. Keep up the good work. Congratulations. Earl Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/6/2015 1:15:00 AM Hi Earl I really enjoyed this challenge Earl:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2015 4:09:00 PM Hi Jan...I had not realized you had taken this train, must have missed it before. It is never that easy to find the right one! Congrats on yet another win! hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/5/2015 4:20:00 PM I wrote this one when I was in Malta Paul :-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 1/5/2015 3:35:00 PM Congratulations Jan! I am pleased to see your name on my winners list. I think you did an excellent job with the form. I hope you write more of them. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/5/2015 4:19:00 PM I was inspired when i saw yours Richard thanks for running the contest and for my 5th place:-) hugs Jan xx

Liam Mcdaid Date: 12/4/2014 8:44:00 PM as always jan the very beautiful pen pal Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/5/2014 1:03:00 AM Thanks so much Liam - love the new avatar:-) Hugs jan xx

Joseph May Date: 12/3/2014 7:39:00 PM Very nice write Jan...best wishes in the contest...hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/4/2014 4:30:00 AM Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs Janxx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/1/2014 10:48:00 PM you did so great with this way of writing. I hope I can try it out. IS this the one you mentioned in hotmail? I am still waiting for a soupmail from you on you know who. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/2/2014 1:13:00 AM I think so - new form by Richard - its fun:-) Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick Date: 12/1/2014 5:10:00 PM Reads like a winner to me..Way to go with this entry..Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats..Sara Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/1/2014 5:12:00 PM Thanks for dropping by Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Ken Carroll Date: 12/1/2014 2:10:00 PM Well crafted emotional write Jan..Good luck! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/1/2014 2:14:00 PM Thanks so much Ken:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud Date: 12/1/2014 12:14:00 PM filled with emotive lines, jan... a flowing beauty of a piece!.. huggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/1/2014 12:20:00 PM Thanks Nette is is a really lovely form to attempt:-) hugs jan xx

Monterey Sirak Date: 12/1/2014 8:01:00 AM Such a sad poem. I love that you ended it with hope. I think you have a winner! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/1/2014 11:09:00 AM Thanks Monterey

Debbie Guzzi Date: 12/1/2014 7:44:00 AM So nice to read your writing this morning. Light & Love Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/1/2014 11:09:00 AM Thanks Debbie:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 12/1/2014 12:27:00 AM Excellent. Very touching. enjoyed reading it. Tfs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/1/2014 1:05:00 AM Thanks Ravi:-) Hugs Jan x

David Meade Date: 11/30/2014 8:14:00 PM You talent does shine -- your love for writing is effervescent -- it flows forth from your heart! Keep writing girl and I will keep reading them. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 12/1/2014 1:04:00 AM Thanks for the lovely comment David - believe me at the moment writing is keeping me afloat:-( Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 5:08:00 PM No it is not necessary for the purpose of the contest but it would please me to no end. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/30/2014 5:09:00 PM I will keep this one in the contest but pen another one too:-) Hugs jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 11/30/2014 4:54:00 PM Great job Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/30/2014 4:55:00 PM Thanks Brenda - have a go its fun:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/30/2014 4:49:00 PM Thanks for being the first Jan, I am pleased. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/30/2014 4:55:00 PM oops when i posted my comment to you i didn't know it was to be for a contest - do you want me to pen a new one now? Hugs jan xx

Debbie Guzzi Date: 11/30/2014 4:36:00 PM Love, you can't live without it but damn sometimes it hurts! Light & Love Login to Reply

Tim Smith Date: 11/30/2014 3:22:00 PM Oh is Richard having a contest? ...great ones Jan...hugs Tim Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/30/2014 3:35:00 PM yes enter yours! Hugs jan x

Joey Peters Date: 11/30/2014 3:18:00 PM Fantastic words love the emotion. -Joey Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/30/2014 3:36:00 PM Thanks so much Joey:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton Date: 11/30/2014 3:07:00 PM love it Jan gl in contest 7 Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/30/2014 3:08:00 PM Thanks so much Shadow:-) hugs jan xx

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