Jan Allison Poet Verse

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Thanks to Richard Lamoureux for inspiring me to write in this Musette form:-)

Heartbreak

Goodbye
I’ll hide my tears
Won’t cry

Crying
Heart is breaking
Tears fall

Falling
In love with you
Was bliss

Blissful
Together forever
You lied

Lying
Sealing our fate
So long

Longing
For the right one
Some day

2,4,2 non rhyming form
Contest:Mussetle Train
Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux


11~30~ 2014


Title changed from heartbreak to Heartbroken for

''H'' Contest, New or Old Poems Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Constance La France

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Poet Destroyer A January 15, 2015 at 11:53 PM weeee! back here again... you are welcome... PD Jan Allison January 16, 2015 at 2:33 AM :-) xx Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A January 11, 2015 at 9:02 PM lovely win...PD Jan Allison January 12, 2015 at 1:04 AM Thanks Linda:-) Hugs Jan x

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 9, 2015 at 10:39 PM You wrote a fantastic poem in this challenging form, Jan...from love to heartbreak to hope, I enjoyed every stage. Congrats!! Hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison January 10, 2015 at 4:05 AM Thanks Rhonda I had fun with this challenging form Richard found for us:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kelly Deschler January 8, 2015 at 12:44 AM I think you've done a great job with this difficult new form. The words and images all flow so smoothly together... Congrats on the win, Jan! Jan Allison January 8, 2015 at 7:50 AM Thanks so much Kelly I really enjoyed the challenge Richard set us:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kayod5 Kayode January 5, 2015 at 11:48 PM Congrats on the win Jan...huggs Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 1:16 AM Thanks so much Kayod5:-) Hugs Jan xx

Earl Schumacker January 5, 2015 at 7:42 PM Hi Jan, Very nice...sad...but nice. Excellent win. Solid structure. Good for you. Keep up the good work. Congratulations. Earl Jan Allison January 6, 2015 at 1:15 AM Hi Earl I really enjoyed this challenge Earl:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus January 5, 2015 at 4:09 PM Hi Jan...I had not realized you had taken this train, must have missed it before. It is never that easy to find the right one! Congrats on yet another win! hugs // paul Jan Allison January 5, 2015 at 4:20 PM I wrote this one when I was in Malta Paul :-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux January 5, 2015 at 3:35 PM Congratulations Jan! I am pleased to see your name on my winners list. I think you did an excellent job with the form. I hope you write more of them. Jan Allison January 5, 2015 at 4:19 PM I was inspired when i saw yours Richard thanks for running the contest and for my 5th place:-) hugs Jan xx

Liam Mcdaid December 4, 2014 at 8:44 PM as always jan the very beautiful pen pal Jan Allison December 5, 2014 at 1:03 AM Thanks so much Liam - love the new avatar:-) Hugs jan xx

Joseph May December 3, 2014 at 7:39 PM Very nice write Jan...best wishes in the contest...hugs Jan Allison December 4, 2014 at 4:30 AM Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs Janxx

Andrea Dietrich December 1, 2014 at 10:48 PM you did so great with this way of writing. I hope I can try it out. IS this the one you mentioned in hotmail? I am still waiting for a soupmail from you on you know who. Jan Allison December 2, 2014 at 1:13 AM I think so - new form by Richard - its fun:-) Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick December 1, 2014 at 5:10 PM Reads like a winner to me..Way to go with this entry..Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats..Sara Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 5:12 PM Thanks for dropping by Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Ken Carroll December 1, 2014 at 2:10 PM Well crafted emotional write Jan..Good luck! Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 2:14 PM Thanks so much Ken:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud December 1, 2014 at 12:14 PM filled with emotive lines, jan... a flowing beauty of a piece!.. huggs Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 12:20 PM Thanks Nette is is a really lovely form to attempt:-) hugs jan xx

Monterey Sirak December 1, 2014 at 8:01 AM Such a sad poem. I love that you ended it with hope. I think you have a winner! Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 11:09 AM Thanks Monterey

Debbie Guzzi December 1, 2014 at 7:44 AM So nice to read your writing this morning. Light & Love Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 11:09 AM Thanks Debbie:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam December 1, 2014 at 12:27 AM Excellent. Very touching. enjoyed reading it. Tfs Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 1:05 AM Thanks Ravi:-) Hugs Jan x

David Meade November 30, 2014 at 8:14 PM You talent does shine -- your love for writing is effervescent -- it flows forth from your heart! Keep writing girl and I will keep reading them. Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 1:04 AM Thanks for the lovely comment David - believe me at the moment writing is keeping me afloat:-( Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 5:08 PM No it is not necessary for the purpose of the contest but it would please me to no end. Jan Allison November 30, 2014 at 5:09 PM I will keep this one in the contest but pen another one too:-) Hugs jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans November 30, 2014 at 4:54 PM Great job Jan. Jan Allison November 30, 2014 at 4:55 PM Thanks Brenda - have a go its fun:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2014 at 4:49 PM Thanks for being the first Jan, I am pleased. Jan Allison November 30, 2014 at 4:55 PM oops when i posted my comment to you i didn't know it was to be for a contest - do you want me to pen a new one now? Hugs jan xx

Debbie Guzzi November 30, 2014 at 4:36 PM Love, you can't live without it but damn sometimes it hurts! Light & Love

Tim Smith November 30, 2014 at 3:22 PM Oh is Richard having a contest? ...great ones Jan...hugs Tim Jan Allison November 30, 2014 at 3:35 PM yes enter yours! Hugs jan x

Joey Peters November 30, 2014 at 3:18 PM Fantastic words love the emotion. -Joey Jan Allison November 30, 2014 at 3:36 PM Thanks so much Joey:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton November 30, 2014 at 3:07 PM love it Jan gl in contest 7 Jan Allison November 30, 2014 at 3:08 PM Thanks so much Shadow:-) hugs jan xx

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