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Written on April 29th, 2025 for Empress's Micro Contest. Word used Heartbeat.
Breathing in acid rain, seeing red, wrath burns through translucent veins, heartbeat rattles against a jilted sternum.

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Date: 5/8/2025 4:18:00 AM
Dear sara, very unique wordplay in your poem for the prompt! How well youv described the prompt here , heartbeat that is unforgettable, and so very soul stirring! I love especially "translucent veins" " jilted sternum" excellent! Dark and powerful! Thank you for sharing! Congratulations on your top win! Sending you light
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Sara Jama
Date: 5/8/2025 4:35:00 AM
Thank you for placing me and for the kind words Ink.
Date: 5/8/2025 1:47:00 AM
- Congratulations on your great micro poem, Sara :) - hugs
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Sara Jama
Date: 5/8/2025 4:35:00 AM
Thank you so much.
Date: 4/29/2025 10:28:00 PM
Deep image- wow :)
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/30/2025 3:53:00 PM
Thank you very much.
Date: 4/29/2025 2:03:00 PM
Wow this one rotted my core in 5 seconds flat! Powerful stuff! Good luck in the contest
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Sara Jama
Date: 4/30/2025 3:54:00 PM
Thank you so much.

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