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Heart Stops

Heart stops Tick Tock, Tick.....Tock I hold my breath and wait But you refuse to catch my eye Heart breaks.

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Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/7/2011 5:54:00 AM

ouchy-- heartbreaking indeed! Emma-- very effective write you have here-- :)

John Castro

Date: 3/18/2011 7:52:00 AM

wooooo i felt my heart ;)

John Castro

Date: 3/18/2011 7:52:00 AM

7up

George Aul

Date: 3/17/2011 11:41:00 AM

Great write..........George

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/15/2011 3:22:00 PM

I like the rhyming way you did this cute cinquain, Emma.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/15/2011 2:56:00 PM

So many people, both men and women, watch and wait longingly as you describe so well, Emma. I hope you find one who returns your affection without forcing you to wait for heartache. Insightful poem! Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/15/2011 1:52:00 PM

lovely cinquain on the heart break, Emma