Haven

Harassed by forked tongue Against treacherous rocks flung Very nearly drowned Eventually I found Never-neverland~ Safe ground! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: Tankacrostic Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich Placed 3rd © 18th May 2021

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/19/2021 4:35:00 AM

Nice one, Paul, congratulations on winning with this beauty:)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/22/2021 7:11:00 AM

Thank you, Jo. Regards & Blessings are sent your way :) // paul

Kim Merryman

Date: 6/8/2021 2:10:00 PM

Well written, Paul! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M

Paul Callus
Date: 6/18/2021 12:54:00 PM

Thank you, Kim. Regards & blessings // paul

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/8/2021 9:28:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A heavenly write about "Heaven." Love It. Enjoy your win with blessings..............

Paul Callus
Date: 6/18/2021 12:03:00 PM

Thank you Paula; glad you enjoyed this. Best regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/6/2021 1:43:00 PM

Hi Paul, I’m just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 6/18/2021 12:02:00 PM

A double thank you is sent your way, Alexis :) Have a lovely weekend :) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/6/2021 12:09:00 PM

I'm a big fan of never-never land, so I really enjoyed this one, Paul. WELL done and congrats in my contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/18/2021 12:01:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. I had not realized I had more comments to read!! Notifications used to make life easier! ~ Warm regards // paul

Ann Foster

Date: 5/26/2021 7:20:00 AM

Excellent. I love it. The extra inference to a child's SAFE place... story... is wonderful... Ann

Paul Callus
Date: 5/27/2021 2:53:00 PM

Thank you, Ann. I'm pleased you found this to your liking. ~ Best regards // paul

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 5/24/2021 3:14:00 PM

Your brilliant poems are always a pleasure to read, Paul. And you use very few lines, and very words to compose a powerful artistic piece, a lot of times with a great sense of humour. Warm wishes ~ Mala

Paul Callus
Date: 5/27/2021 2:51:00 PM

Thank you, Mala; your lovely feedback and generous comments are truly appreciated. ~ Warm regards // paul

Quoth Theraven

Date: 5/22/2021 2:30:00 PM

Paul, That fine ending N in Acrostic flash of rocks flung. 'Never-neverland~ Safe ground!' Your words hold sway. Mine would wish you good luck. -Richard

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2021 7:20:00 AM

Thank you, Richard. Your visits are always very welcome. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/21/2021 8:18:00 AM

Perhaps these rocks are a metaphor for life's troubles. Quite a few of us have trouble staying afloat. I like the thought of finding Peter Pan's Neverland! A clever take on Andrea's contest. Wishing you success! Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2021 7:18:00 AM

Metaphor is the spine of this poem, Carolyn, and you are certainly on the right track! Thank you for your insightful comments. Love & Hugs // paul

Ann Foster

Date: 5/20/2021 1:08:00 PM

Wonderful... thought and image invoking together. Great stuff... Ann

Paul Callus
Date: 5/23/2021 7:04:00 AM

Thank you, Ann. Your lovely feedback is appreciated. ~ Best regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/20/2021 10:11:00 AM

Excellent Paul! I am sure Andrea will love your entry. I did. Blessings, Connie xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 12:20:00 PM

Thank you, Connie. So pleased to have you stopping by with encouraging words. Warm regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/19/2021 6:04:00 PM

Hi Paul, You did a great job combining the two forms. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:37:00 AM

Thank you dear Alexis. Your visit is appreciated. Warm regards // paul

John Lawless

Date: 5/19/2021 5:41:00 AM

.."straight ahead and on til morning, first star on the right"....

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:36:00 AM

Thank you, John. Directions noted :) Best regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/19/2021 5:34:00 AM

The journey through life that we all hope will end at that safe haven. Good luck Paul, hope you're well. Tom

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:36:00 AM

I totally agree with you, Tom. Thank you for stopping by. Best regards // paul

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/19/2021 5:34:00 AM

Gorgeous write. I love it. God bless you always, Love, Gina

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:35:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed my offering, Gina; thank you! Love & Blessings // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 5/19/2021 5:02:00 AM

Not just a composition of words! Not a mere rendition of a poetic form! It is rather a powerful artistic ability to infuse genuineness, beauty and insight into your multidimensional poetry! Always an immense pleasure to read you Paul! My warmest wishes and best regards.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:34:00 AM

Thank you dear Besma...it is my pleasure to read your insightful feedback. Warm regards and blessings // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/19/2021 4:54:00 AM

I like the uplifting ending--everyone should find that happy phase in life. Well done, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:32:00 AM

Thank you for reading an commenting, Vijay. Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/18/2021 5:36:00 PM

The glass is always half full, right? If one can find the strength to keep going, eventually it gets better. This is a positive look at life (IMO) Good luck my friend. Hoping all is well with you, Paul:)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/20/2021 9:31:00 AM

Thank you, Danny. Usually I prefer to end with a taste of positivity. Hope you're keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul