Just That Archaic Poet Poet Rhyme

Hammer To a Concrete Heart

I did not write for many years;
Nay! I ne'er penned a verse!
I was too consumed by fears:
The kind that cripple first...
Ev'ry thought was coarse- was terse!
A concrete Heart about to burst!-
Devoured by Dragons when I fell off the wagon-
Please, stop reading, and call me a hearse!

*"Writing" Contest Entry*

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Verlena S. Walker August 14, 2014 at 6:19 PM Nice pen Archaic... congrats on your big win! Verlena

Casarah Nance August 14, 2014 at 6:11 PM A thought many experience, well done on your win ;)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 12, 2014 at 7:37 AM Brilliant n unique is ur write my friend, congrats on big win!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 12, 2014 at 7:36 AM Brilliant n unique is ur write my friend, congrats on big win!

Jan Allison August 12, 2014 at 7:11 AM unique take on the theme and I love the title:-) many congrats. Hugs jan xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen August 12, 2014 at 6:33 AM - Congratulations on your winning poem in the contest: "Writing" - sponsored by: Regina Riddle - Really deserved, JTAPoet ! -oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Dr.Ram Mehta August 12, 2014 at 5:02 AM Quite a unique approach to the theme of the contest, JTAP

Kelly Deschler September 27, 2013 at 1:54 PM A heart of concrete is hard to break with a hammer! An interesting and unique verse that you have penned here. I am so glad that you kept on writing! Great work!...I have a new poem that I think you might enjoy, it is titled, "To Be Or Not To Be". Just That Archaic Poet September 28, 2013 at 9:51 AM Thanks, Kelly. You picked up on the intended irony of the title: a hammer is pretty useless against concrete, hence no hope of breaking it open. I thought in the last line it would be fun to actually address and engage the reader; not sure if it helps or hinders the piece. I will check out your poem very soon! :)

Vinayak Pratap September 25, 2013 at 9:38 PM evry1 goes through tis hw 1 copes wit it shows d character of d person... ~V~ Just That Archaic Poet September 26, 2013 at 7:31 AM I shouldn't have said that, Vin; I apologize. I should appreciate each and every review of my work, no matter how someone chooses to format their words. That was a shitty thing for to say and I'm sorry. I was in a bad mood last night and was needlessly rude to you. Hope you can forgive me :) Just That Archaic Poet September 25, 2013 at 9:48 PM Thank you for taking time to read and respond to my poem; however, I don't feign to comprehend typing in an abbreviated manner. It's off-putting.

Poet Destroyer A September 24, 2013 at 8:17 AM pretty cool poem glad you got over your fears and are writing ~always pd Just That Archaic Poet September 24, 2013 at 8:43 AM I appreciate that; thank you, PD :)