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Haiku - Water

skimming stones on lake
they dance across the water
splish splash, now silence

05~03~17

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Valerie Staton

April 7, 2017 at 6:32 PM

Very nice! I also have a splish, splash Haiku! Enjoyed reading. loved the accompanying pic!

Jan Allison

August 27, 2017 at 7:53 AM

Thanks Valerie I'm sorry I have only just found your comment:-( hugs jan xx

Jenny Brewer

March 14, 2017 at 7:41 PM

Hello my dearest friend.... Fabulous Haiku hun,You know I do love a beautiful Haiku and this is one,Lovely. I hope you are well,xxx Mahoosive Hugs Jenny xxx

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 7:05 PM

Jennnyyyyyyyyyyyyyy so lovely to see your smiling face:-) :-) Without your encouragement I wouldn't be the writer I am now:-) :-) hugs jan xx

John Michaels

March 13, 2017 at 5:25 PM

Lovely little write, with a splash of alliteration and onomatopoeia for good measure!

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 7:04 PM

I tried to use several poetic devices John:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

March 11, 2017 at 10:26 PM

Great writing with such lovely imagery.:-) It's the circles in the water then silence, that is so mesmerizing. What a fantastic theme Jan. blessings, :-) lynn

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 7:04 PM

Thanks Lynn:-) hugs Jan xx

Pashang Salehi

March 8, 2017 at 4:53 PM

Very nice Jan... best of luck...

Jan Allison

March 8, 2017 at 5:12 PM

Thanks Pashang:-) hugs Jan xx

Lenny Gazbowski

March 7, 2017 at 10:44 AM

A top write Jan.

Jan Allison

March 7, 2017 at 4:59 PM

Thanks Lenny:-)

John Lawless

March 6, 2017 at 6:30 PM

AH, Jan, an ode to the flat round river rock.....

Jan Allison

March 7, 2017 at 4:59 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith

March 6, 2017 at 3:09 PM

I've never out grown the desire to skip a stone across the water, such vivid imagery Jan...

Jan Allison

March 6, 2017 at 3:30 PM

Thanks Charlie I hope Charlotte likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

March 6, 2017 at 11:37 AM

I love the visual aspect and sound leading to silence, Jan. gl in the contest. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

March 6, 2017 at 1:15 PM

Thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

March 6, 2017 at 10:01 AM

Hi Jan, I loved the imagery in this well written Haiku. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:) Alexis

Jan Allison

March 6, 2017 at 1:16 PM

Thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

March 6, 2017 at 9:51 AM

Great imagery in this ku Jan

Jan Allison

March 6, 2017 at 1:16 PM

Thanks Tim:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett

March 6, 2017 at 4:55 AM

Lovely Haiku Jan, good luck in contest, Roy. :)

Jan Allison

March 6, 2017 at 1:16 PM

Thanks Roy:-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam

March 6, 2017 at 3:16 AM

Excellent haiku. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Jan Allison

March 6, 2017 at 1:17 PM

Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

March 5, 2017 at 10:12 PM

I really like this, Jan. GReat job sticking with traditional 5/7/5! Wish I could see more. I got waylaid on comments. Joe almost home and I am SO behind here. Argggh

Jan Allison

March 6, 2017 at 1:06 AM

I don't know how you manage to fit everything in Andrea I hope Charlotte likes it:-) hugs Jan xx