Haiku - Dolphin

porpoising the waves
pod plays in warm turquoise sea -
silver torpedoes


Susan Ashley
September 27, 2018
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Alhemaidy Avatar
September 25, 2019 at 11:20 AM
Wonderful!
Ashley Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 8:26 PM
Thank you, Abdullah! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
De Beaulieu Avatar
November 30, 2018 at 7:15 PM
Hello Susan, dolphins are just woderful to see jumping from the water then back into it. Have a nice evening my friend.
Ashley Avatar
November 30, 2018 at 7:46 PM
Oh yes, Darlene, I completely agree. Your kind visit and wonderful comments are heartwarming on this chilly evening. Thank you, my wonderful friend, and I hope you have an enjoyable evening as well. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Kendrick Avatar
November 26, 2018 at 6:41 AM
Whoa!! That is a scary one. I wonder how many pods of fish died during the wars that were fought on the ocean or were you speaking of the fish looking like a silver torpedo? Enjoyed reading your work. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Ashley Avatar
November 26, 2018 at 9:46 PM
It's a pleasure to have your presence here, Sara. After reading your insightful comments, I can appreciate your dark interpretation of my haiku. I can see how you could read this to mean a wartime scenario, but my haiku really means that the dolphins resemble silver torpedos.. Thank you for your wonderful visit and for your kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Horsman Avatar
November 13, 2018 at 10:29 AM
Over and over i have witness such scenes Susan, and your poem, brings back the wonderful memories.
Ashley Avatar
November 13, 2018 at 8:37 PM
How sweet it is to witness the beauty of Nature, Harry. I’m please to know that my poem brought back wonderful memories for you, my friend. Your lovely comments are a joy to receive, thank you. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Michaels Avatar
November 7, 2018 at 9:13 AM
Hi Susan! Lovely imagery - I love the use of the word "porpoising"!! Regards, John.
Ashley Avatar
November 7, 2018 at 9:29 PM
John, it so wonderful to hear from you - I've missed your presence.. Thank you for your gracious visit and your beautiful comments, both are truly appreciated. I will have to check out your page for new writes.. Thank you again, my friend.. ~Susan
Rodrigues Avatar
November 5, 2018 at 3:39 AM
Just gorgeous!
Ashley Avatar
November 5, 2018 at 1:48 PM
Your visit is always a delight, Kim. Thank you for your precious comment. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
October 11, 2018 at 5:47 PM
what a cute image, silver torpedoes. I enjoyed this, Susan
Ashley Avatar
October 11, 2018 at 8:04 PM
Thank you, Andrea, for your wonderful comments. I’m glad you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes.. -~Susan
Raven Avatar
October 8, 2018 at 7:26 AM
Hi Susan, this is a wonderful Haiku, the visions come through so easily through your wonderful lines. I do love this form and I am faving this excellent Haiku. I love the content. Have a wonderful Monday. Hugs....Mike. XX
Ashley Avatar
October 8, 2018 at 1:12 PM
Thank you, Mike, for the delight of your uplifting comments and for the fave. I'm so pleased that enjoyed the playful imagery of my haiku. I relish your inspiring and heartwarming thoughts my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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October 6, 2018 at 4:00 PM
This is a great haiku full of wonderful imagery, Susan. I love the last line. warm wishes ~Warren
Ashley Avatar
October 7, 2018 at 9:40 AM
Thank you, Warren for your uplifting comments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed my haiku. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Dutta Avatar
October 3, 2018 at 6:31 AM
Nice rhythm. I admire Susan. Only three lines touch excellence.
Ashley Avatar
October 3, 2018 at 11:02 AM
Thank you, Anisha, for your lovely and uplifting comments. I relish your kind thoughts. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Wolf Avatar
October 2, 2018 at 9:54 PM
Simply very well-done, my friend! ~ gw
Ashley Avatar
October 3, 2018 at 11:01 AM
Thank you, Gershon, for your uplifting and truly appreciated comment. Warmest wishes my wonderful friend.. ~Susan
Lindley Avatar
October 1, 2018 at 11:57 AM
Such striking beauty in this wonderful haiku my dear friend! Silver torpedoes indeed! They oft seem like birds in flight they way the move through the waters. A fav and a gem..
Ashley Avatar
October 3, 2018 at 10:56 AM
Indeed, my dear friend, they do appear as if in flight as they glide the waters. Thank you, dear Robert, for your beautiful comments and for the fav. Both your kindness and your wonderful friendship are cherished.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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September 30, 2018 at 3:28 PM
Your imagery is strikingly projected on the screen of my mind, Susan! By the way, earlier this month we took my granddaughter swimming with the dolphins for her lucky birthday - a unique experience! ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul
Ashley Avatar
October 1, 2018 at 10:23 AM
A lucky birthday indeed! What a wonderful experience to be shared with your granddaughter - memories made and cherished! I'm so glad to hear that my imagery was so strongly visualized in your mind's eye, Paul. Your beautiful thoughts warm my heart, as they always do, my inspiring friend.. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 29, 2018 at 1:16 AM
Ohhhh, you finished this magnificently Susan! Breathtaking imagery in this gem of a haiku! All week the pop up ads were keeping me from reading and commenting. I think they fixed it now. : )
Ashley Avatar
October 1, 2018 at 9:39 AM
I relish your wonderful comments, Connie. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my imagery, and yes, those pop up ads are really annoying. Thank you for your persistence in working through that vexing problem and for bringing your awesome insight to my page. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
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September 28, 2018 at 6:31 AM
I love those silver torpedoes, love bombs! Darling haiku, my best to you Susan! xomo <3
Ashley Avatar
October 1, 2018 at 9:35 AM
Indeed, love bombs! Your awesome comments are cherished, Maureen :)) I'm so pleased you enjoyed my haiku! Warmest wishes my dear friend.. ~Susan <3
Pett Avatar
September 28, 2018 at 6:09 AM
brilliant haiku Susan, creates wonderful images within the mind, good luck in contest. :))
Ashley Avatar
September 29, 2018 at 10:01 AM
Thank you, Roy, for the delight of your uplifting comments. I'm so pleased that enjoyed the playful imagery of my haiku. I relish your inspiring and heartwarming thoughts my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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September 28, 2018 at 3:17 AM
I want to jump in there with those silver torpedoes! This haiku is fine! Fun too.
Ashley Avatar
September 29, 2018 at 9:58 AM
Thank you, Caren, for the delight of your comments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed the playful imagery. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Cunningham Avatar
September 27, 2018 at 11:11 PM
Beautiful image Susan. Tom
Ashley Avatar
September 29, 2018 at 9:56 AM
Thank you, Tom, for your heartwarming comments. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Gauthier Avatar
September 27, 2018 at 8:44 PM
Love the imagery, Susan. Delightfully playful.
Ashley Avatar
September 29, 2018 at 9:55 AM
Your esteemed and wonderful comments are a heartwarming thrill to receive, Line. I'm so please that you enjoyed my haiku. Thank you for your lovely thoughts. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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