Haiku Clandestine

heavy hidden moon sigh moans pleasures of the night cruel kisses bleed © rajat kanti chakrabarty revised org 8/12/2014

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/14/2014 4:33:00 PM

Was the moon hidden by clouds?..Interesting work that you have penned..Created many vivid pictures in just a few words...Thanks for the visit to my page.Sara

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty
Date: 12/17/2014 11:22:00 AM

Sara this is an erotic haiku where moon has a passive role . I have written some erotic haiku where moon is a male partner or lover( active role). Here moon feels betrayed when his partner is passionately in love with her paramour.Moon is basically shy. He watches the act of love-making from behind the curtain of cloud hidden and heavy-hearted. Love Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/14/2014 11:49:00 AM

Lots of emotion in such a small poem. wish I could see more. I need to hurry off here now. thanks for your visit to my poetry.

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty
Date: 12/14/2014 11:59:00 AM

Hurry and Curry Andrea will upset your stomach.So....love rajat