Haiku Attempt 1 the Mass Murder

A Shotgun Gleaming
Spent Shells make noise in the forceful wind
Bodies lay lifeless

Note: Still learning how to create haikus feedback and help much appreciated!
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February 7, 2016 at 6:18 AM
Hi, Romeo.... I like your positive reply. I'm looking forward in having you visit my poems. Happy Super Bowl day ....Linda
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February 1, 2016 at 2:28 PM
Hi, Agent < are you going to try the second haiku? skat
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February 1, 2016 at 5:11 PM
yup practice makes perfect -Romeo
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January 28, 2016 at 7:45 PM
Nice verse, Agent, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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January 31, 2016 at 4:06 PM
Thanks I'm glad you like my haiku attempt I look forward to reading your poems and receiving more feedback on my poems also my new poet friend -Romeo
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January 28, 2016 at 4:01 AM
(nice attempt) dark imagery
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January 28, 2016 at 4:00 AM
Hi, Agent Romeo, wrong syllable count , Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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January 31, 2016 at 4:11 PM
Thanks for the feedback. Next time i will get the syllable count right. I find it pleasing you enjoyed my haiku attempt. I look forward to reading your poems and receiving more feedback from you my new poet friend -Romeo
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