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Haiku Six

I find your name
           rolling across my tongue
           but you never come true


                         days of old gone
                        words dripped on pages
                         and I read them still 

          bees are buzzing with bliss 
           honey drips from tongue
             buckets filled with rum  


                       eyes of blue 
                      you are so true
                   I'm still leaving you 

                 you call my name
           I'm going the opposite way
        I just don't have time for you today 


     we were the best of friends
      it was the best of times
      then love got in the way



 I wrote these "all" in 2011, I know they're not the  5 - 7 - 5, but here I am posting.

Copyright © Debbie Duncan | Year Posted 2013

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John Posey Date: 9/15/2013 6:35:00 PM Debbie, sometimes I believe we let form limit our emotion. We strain to meet the rules and somehow lose the core intent of the verse..... I loved it and never counted any syllables at all.... Jake Login to Reply

Sean Goodwin Date: 4/20/2013 12:05:00 PM Very unique; penned with much emotion. I like how it ended. The 3rd one is just sublime! -- Sean Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/18/2013 6:47:00 PM Debbie, your haiku are perfect I like the 3rd one... and for some reason I feel as if you had fun writing down these haiku,,,,, always~ Linda Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 4/19/2013 1:08:00 AM Thank you Linda, I did have fun ;}

Anthony O. Mitchell Jr. Date: 4/7/2013 11:29:00 PM Nicely done, I enjoyed all of your work to this point and looking forward to reading more. Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 4/8/2013 12:55:00 AM Thank you ;}

Holly Moore Date: 4/5/2013 10:18:00 AM I think they are very beautifully expressed. 54321, whatever, right? Much emotion, here. Thanks for your comment on my site....xxoo Holly Moore Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 4/5/2013 3:08:00 PM ;}

Suzanne Delaney Date: 4/4/2013 8:13:00 PM An enjoyable set and quite jaunty in their own way .......glad you had time for me today.....tee hee SuZ Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 4/4/2013 8:56:00 PM ;}

Bl Devnath Date: 4/4/2013 10:41:00 AM Beautiful one. Loved always, bl Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 4/4/2013 2:22:00 PM Thank you

Duke Beaufort Date: 4/1/2013 6:28:00 AM What I think you have said here is that time and love have so many different outcomes. The license you have taken with the 5-7-5 only adds to the setting. So you are a free spirit. Me--I have decided to stick to one form just for the sake of ease and image. You have my admiration and respect for all that you do with words. I do so enjoy looking at your writing. You are so cool! Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 4/2/2013 6:12:00 PM ;}

Jeremy Martin Date: 3/27/2013 10:07:00 PM 'honey drips from the tongue buckets full of rum' Yes! Gorgeous. Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/28/2013 5:03:00 PM thank you, my fav lines too ;}

Matthew Anish Date: 3/14/2013 10:55:00 AM Haikus don't have to be 5 7 5 - they can be different because the 5 7 5 relates to an Asian form. Love gets in the way of a lot of things. Stimulating work here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/14/2013 2:48:00 PM Thanks for reading ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/6/2013 2:39:00 PM .... I do not count ....... It is YOUR (!) Haiku! - And it is very well written!! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/6/2013 10:34:00 PM Thank you Anne ;}

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/5/2013 8:56:00 PM Debbie, I am really glad you posted these because they make for a very fun read. The first two are my very favorites. They are all very sweet how they relate to love. Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/6/2013 10:15:00 PM Thank you Andrea ;}

Donna Jones Date: 3/5/2013 5:12:00 PM I love your writing Debbie, you seem like an old friend to me..... Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/6/2013 9:59:00 PM Thank you Donna ;}

Duke Beaufort Date: 3/5/2013 4:19:00 PM These are a lot of fun. You are definitely your own person! Thank-you for all your comments. Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/5/2013 9:38:00 PM Thank you Duke

Harry Horsman Date: 3/5/2013 3:26:00 PM lovely to read Debbie.. and that is what counts.. Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/5/2013 6:26:00 PM Thank you harry ;}

Sara Kendrick Date: 3/5/2013 8:13:00 AM Expressive work...Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for stopping by ..There are two ways to write ABC form under that form on this site..One is much easier than the other...Cyndi that sponsored the contest required couplets about topics listed with a couplet at the end summarizing the poem..So it was hard..I ran the idea over and over in my thoughts for days and figured that the contest was closed then started writing ..I then looked and the contest wasn't closed so I entered..Sara Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/5/2013 5:50:00 PM Thank you Sara,,

Sukmawati Komala Date: 3/5/2013 8:10:00 AM sweet Debbie...here is another lovely haiku... so nicely written... enjoyed so much...wishing you all the best dear :) <3 Sk Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/5/2013 11:02:00 AM Thank you ;}

Raul Moreno Date: 3/5/2013 2:41:00 AM Nice work, I enjoyed the third one. Keep up the good work... Login to Reply Debbie Duncan Date: 3/5/2013 10:55:00 AM Thank you Raul .