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haiku 9: shootings

haiku 9: shootings the birds were chirping--- butterflies played in the air; then there was gunfire.

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Date: 4/10/2015 6:22:00 PM
Your subject touched me, as we've had a wild turkey visiting on a regular basis, and turkey hunting season opened today.
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Date: 4/9/2015 10:56:00 PM
Millard, the idea for this one is quite good. Don't worry about 5/7/5 With shorter lines, this could be quite brilliant!
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Date: 4/10/2015 3:17:00 PM
Andrea, thanks for the feedback. Will keep it in mind when working on other attempts. Need more feedback on modern vs traditional haiku form. Peace and Love, M. Lowe