Haiku 9: Shootings

haiku 9: shootings

the birds were chirping---
butterflies played in the air;
then there was gunfire.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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April 10, 2015 at 6:22 PM
Your subject touched me, as we've had a wild turkey visiting on a regular basis, and turkey hunting season opened today.
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April 9, 2015 at 10:56 PM
Millard, the idea for this one is quite good. Don't worry about 5/7/5 With shorter lines, this could be quite brilliant!
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April 10, 2015 at 3:17 PM
Andrea, thanks for the feedback. Will keep it in mind when working on other attempts. Need more feedback on modern vs traditional haiku form. Peace and Love, M. Lowe
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