Haiku 52

Haiku 52 cocoons under leaves split open, new wings drying white butterflies flit white butterflies flit brilliant yellow squash blossoms zucchini to share white butterflies flit tomato flowers await cool summer salad white butterflies flit tiny cucumbers prickle winter’s dill pickles white butterflies, gone eggs now hidden beneath leaves for next spring’s cocoons

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/24/2013 3:15:00 PM

It looks like this is about the spot I started reading you haiku!! Let me see if I saw the tanka already.

Heather Ober

Date: 5/28/2013 6:53:00 AM

I loved how this set of haiku came full circle. You have made me long for summer this morning!

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/28/2013 7:40:00 AM

Thanks, Heather. Summer where I live is hot and miserable. I sincerely hope it's not that way for you. I enjoyed reading your work yesterday, as always... Jack

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/27/2013 8:42:00 AM

nice poem. take care ~PD

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/27/2013 9:36:00 AM

Thanks, PD. You too...

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/25/2013 12:42:00 AM

You really gave me a clear idea of where all those white butterflies went (and made me mad hungry for salads). Charming haiku!

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/26/2013 4:53:00 PM

Thanks, Timothy. The butterflies are still flitting around my garden.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/25/2013 12:33:00 AM

I like how this flowed along on the same theme and the one rhymed with pickles so cute!!! Wonderful!

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/26/2013 4:52:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea. I didn't realize there was a rhyme until I posted it. I considered changing it, but decided, why not?

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/24/2013 10:33:00 AM

- Beautiful nature haiku, Jack! - Have a great weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/26/2013 4:51:00 PM

Thanks... It has been a good weekend. I hope you enjoyed yours... Jack

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/24/2013 7:12:00 AM

Full circle..Enjoyed reading your nature work..I hope those were not the ones that lay their eggs on the tomatoes for those horne worms are very destructive..Sara

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/24/2013 7:34:00 AM

I don't think so. These are very small white butterflies. Thanks for reading... Jack