Haiku 50

gray Saturday   
	my spirits match clouds 	
	reflected in puddles

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/24/2013 3:13:00 PM

this one looks familiar to me but I don't have a comment down here. I sure am enjoying your haiku.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/22/2013 11:18:00 PM

Well I suppose you can at least say the puddles are clean enough to have reflections! Weather really does to affect ones mood dramatically... sub-conscience or not, it happens. Don't hate me for saying this for it's a very nit-picky thing... the "my" in the first line looks strange where it is... visually it'd look better in the middle (in my humble opinion). You can leave it as is just fine... but I always strive to be as honest as possible in my comments.

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/23/2013 8:54:00 AM

You're right. I'll change it. Constructive criticism is always welcome. Thanks... Jack

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/19/2013 6:37:00 AM

Sorry for all the rain, that would bring anyone's spirits down. The sun will shine upon you soon.

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/19/2013 9:35:00 AM

It is doing so as I type this. Thanks for reading, Richard.

Karen Anglesey

Date: 5/18/2013 11:51:00 PM

Another huge image created in a few short words. Reminiscent of Oregon. Well done.

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/19/2013 9:34:00 AM

Thank you, Karen. Saturday did indeed turn out to be dark and stormy... Jack

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/18/2013 8:23:00 PM

awe... a little gloomy... but an awesome haiku... perfect for any rainy day... Linda

Jack Jordan
Date: 5/18/2013 9:58:00 PM

The weather prediction here is for days of rain with the occasional tornado, so gloom will continue for a while longer. Thanks for the comment... Jack