Jack Jordan Poet Haiku

Haiku 42 - 1,2,3,4

1
	a noiseless moment 
	he writes in his diary
	incessant snow  


		2
	every day he hoped   
	every day she avoided…  
	waning moon

		
		3
	his need for love 
	he opened his careless mouth 
	oak tree, splintered


		4
	words that she heard
	anger and bewilderment
	forest inferno

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Timothy Hicks April 28, 2013 at 12:01 AM Well you haven't mentioned sunlight yet... that would top it off nicely :) Jack Jordan April 28, 2013 at 9:10 AM Sorry... No sun in this one.

Donna Jones April 27, 2013 at 4:31 PM These are wonderful Jack....I hope it is a happy ending..guess I'll see... Jack Jordan April 28, 2013 at 9:10 AM I'm sorry... It didn't end happily... Jack

Timothy Hicks April 27, 2013 at 2:36 PM These are some of the best haiku I've read by you. I love that each one has a nature metaphor that so accurately describes the emotions happening in the first two lines. I, too, thought the second one was a bit more intense than the others, but each was special in their own way. Can't wait for the last installment :) Jack Jordan April 27, 2013 at 3:17 PM Tomorrow is it, but I'll bet you can guess the ending... Jack

Poet Destroyer A April 27, 2013 at 9:15 AM Good morning Jack, the second one is my favorite. xox~Linda Jack Jordan April 27, 2013 at 12:58 PM Thanks, Linda. Actually, they are four parts of a five-part relationship tale told in Haiku. The final segment is tomorrow. I think I'll attach a note about my intentions... Jack