Haiku 33 B

Gray-dark cloud rotates; an elephant’s trunk dips down, unroofs the farmhouse.

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Painted Hunter

Date: 4/9/2013 6:43:00 AM

then again...she also calls unicorns...nudicorns

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/9/2013 7:13:00 AM

Again, a much better word, I think. Lady Godiva could have used one for certain. Jack

Painted Hunter

Date: 4/9/2013 6:42:00 AM

Yep...lots of tornadoes here...my daughter calls them tormatoes..

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/9/2013 7:12:00 AM

I often think children sense that there are better way to formulate words than do adults. My son had a few that I still use, as did my mother, a farm woman (tomatoes were "maters"). I don't know exactly where you live, but the first tornado possibilities for the season are tonight in Oklahoma, accompanied by ice and snow. Crazy, huh? Jack

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/6/2013 4:54:00 PM

what awesome imagery this creates. Love it.

Jack Jordan
Date: 4/6/2013 6:32:00 PM

Thanks. I wrote it as an extension of 33A. I probably should have published them together. Tornados are predicted for next week where I live. Scary things, they are. Jack

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/5/2013 11:39:00 PM

An outstanding haiku..Charma