Haiku 29

Butterflies and her lips unfasten rare harmonies. Joy in the music. © Jack Jordan 2013

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/28/2013 11:32:00 PM

this is really pretty!

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/29/2013 7:37:00 AM

Thanks, Andrea.

Donna Jones

Date: 3/28/2013 9:03:00 PM

Lovely Jack...I'm going to get brave enough to try one of these some day...Donna

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/28/2013 9:34:00 PM

Thanks, Donna. As I replied to David, the rules are changing, almost to the point where there are no rules. You should give it a try. I can soupmail a few references to you if you are interested. Jack

David Fisher

Date: 3/28/2013 6:54:00 PM

I enjoyed this Haiku...each line has meaning and certainly contributes to the whole.

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/28/2013 8:25:00 PM

Thank you, David. Haiku is an experiment for me. I've found I enjoy working with the form, and have discovered that contemporary English-language haiku do not necessarily follow the traditional 5-7-5 scheme. This one is almost that, but not quite. Jack

Kash Poet

Date: 3/28/2013 12:31:00 PM

good one!

Jack Jordan
Date: 3/28/2013 1:03:00 PM

Thank you!