Haiku 17 - Double

The small, full moment  
of love in the afternoon. 
Awkward and nuanced.
               •
Small, empty moment,
a remembrance of passion. 
My constant sadness.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Dietrich Avatar
February 27, 2013 at 4:41 PM
I love this double one. they both complement each other so well.
Jordan Avatar
February 27, 2013 at 5:21 PM
Thanks. I wrote them separately, then noticed the fit.
Williams Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 11:08 AM
Jack, what was and what is, I like...David
Jordan Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 11:12 AM
Thank you for reading it and for the comment. J
Hunter Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 10:07 AM
Jack, these are truly excellent haikus...some of my favorite in a while. And yes, the addition of bipolar in my monoku is meant to convey the double meaning...or personalities in a haiku. Thank you for looking that far into it....Caleb
Jordan Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 10:25 AM
It's wonderful to know a kindred spirit. Write on, my friend. Jack
Wesley Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 9:46 AM
Both are beautiful Jack, full of warmth and tenderness. You bring love to life in so few words.
Jordan Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 9:50 AM
Thank you, Elizabeth. I appreciate the very nice comment. J
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