Haiku 11-14-2016

Haiku 11/14/2016

Come closer my love
touch softly with stolen light
a Winter’s darkness

John G. Lawless
11/14/2016

metaphorhaiku

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Chris Green

November 15, 2016 at 7:25 AM

I really enjoyed this. The emotions expressed felt soft and comforting. A beautifully written piece.

John Lawless

November 15, 2016 at 12:10 PM

Thanks Chris.

Probir Gupta

November 15, 2016 at 5:56 AM

Touching and lovely ... very good haiku with the striking last line ...

John Lawless

November 15, 2016 at 12:10 PM

Thanks Prober, appreciate your stopping by to comment

Darren White

November 15, 2016 at 4:20 AM

Ohhh, that sends me back to bed.... longing...

John Lawless

November 15, 2016 at 12:09 PM

Jeesh, Darren, I hope you weren't late for work.

Jan Allison

November 15, 2016 at 3:53 AM

this is so so so so so beautiful John it gave me a tingle down my spine when I read it - a gem of a haiku/Senryu ... I wish they had a '3 line poetry' form which is suitable for poems that don't quite fit in the box. Into faves I LOVE it:-) hugs Jan xx

Jan Allison

November 15, 2016 at 7:01 PM

Troika sounds a fantastic idea John - i had a 3 line poem published in a journal by prolific press I must try and find it:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless

November 15, 2016 at 12:09 PM

Glad you got a shiver Jan. Perhaps a very creative Poetrysoup poet might "invent" such a form..let me see...hmmm a poetic "Troika"..three lines...galloping....