Haiku 103

Haiku 103
	
	
	my being’s
	deepbreath    I slowly
	e  x  h  a  l  e

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Ralph Sergi

September 25, 2019 at 11:41 AM

Unique haiku, Jack!

Joseph Sergi

December 3, 2013 at 6:35 PM

like what you did with the spacing of exhale nicely done

Jack Jordan

December 3, 2013 at 8:15 PM

Thank you, Joseph. It was an experiment... Jack

Richard Lamoureux

December 2, 2013 at 8:27 PM

I hope the day improved as it went along Jack.

Andrea Dietrich

December 2, 2013 at 5:43 PM

I like how you used the spacing on this one. A long time ago I used the word Exhale with that kind of spacing too!

Jack Jordan

December 2, 2013 at 6:03 PM

It just felt like a good thing to do... Jack

Poet Tacito

December 2, 2013 at 9:20 AM

...indeed, Jack. Strong Haiku.

Jack Jordan

December 2, 2013 at 12:08 PM

Thanks, Drake. I'm looking forward to this weekend's show... Jack

Richard Lamoureux

December 1, 2013 at 6:39 PM

Take a deep breath of that cool air it will invigorate you. I hope the gray clouds part and you are flooded with glorious sunshine Jack.

Jack Jordan

December 1, 2013 at 8:01 PM

Thank you, Richard. It's just been one of those days... Jack

Anne-Lise Andresen

December 1, 2013 at 3:58 PM

- S A D - Jack - well done! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jack Jordan

December 1, 2013 at 4:12 PM

It is rather sad. I think it's just the gray skies here... Jack

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